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Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
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Virginia, USA

0 posted 2000-05-15 11:12 AM


She said she had the answer
I knew she didnt have a clue
She spoke of times as long
Since before that I met you

Her eyes baked little circles
The weather beat her face
She sits alone at the dawn
And stares off into space

Autumn cries forever
Cries to no avail
Trembling hands and fever
Sweatin' on skin so pale

The night time comes on creepin
And she says she has to go
Onward through a darkened mist
On barefoot in the snow

Autumn cries forever
She screams against the wind
I know I have a purpose
But I've got no hands to lend

The breeze gently speaks now
To the woman of the road
Your burdens aren't for you now
Please let me bear your load

Autumn died and never
Since with the seasons end
Did know what of her meaning
But she found a hand to lend


© Copyright 2000 Wobbly Head Bob - All Rights Reserved
blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
1 posted 2000-05-15 12:59 PM


WHB,
Nice poem, although I suggest that you don't post so many all at once, since it makes readers think that there are too many to read.  Overall though, a big welcome from all of the members of the Pub =b!  Good work here!


 Life defines no more than what it is you ask for.
April 20, 2000
Alicia A. Renzelman

Wobbly Head Bob
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Posts 299
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2 posted 2000-05-15 01:04 PM


Thank you for the compliments, I'm so glad you liked the poem.  Furthermore, my apologies for posting so many at once, I just joined here, and had poems to share that I thought would be enjoyed, I just wanted to get them up.  I hope not everyone thinks that there are too many, there are only five!  Thanks for your reply!
Denise
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3 posted 2000-05-15 03:36 PM


Welcome to Passions, Bob! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
4 posted 2000-05-15 03:50 PM


Out of your many( ) five thus posted i enjoyed this one most...this is my kinda poem...love it lots!! =]

swampie


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

Casonova
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since 2000-04-29
Posts 35
Mays Landing
5 posted 2000-05-15 06:05 PM


I really enjoyed your poem, And the other four, thanks for posting them..   Welcome to the pub wobbly. I know you'll enjoy your stay


               Casonova

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2000-05-15 07:53 PM


I like this very much..sort of like an old fashioned folk song.  Welcome to the family!  
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
7 posted 2000-05-15 08:43 PM


The Pub is a neat place for sure - I know you'll like it here, Wob... Can't help but see you wobblin' around here today... nice poem, btw..
Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
8 posted 2000-05-16 02:39 AM


This is the first I've read, out of the ones everyone else is referring too, and I really like it.  I look forward to reading more of your work.  

 I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

epoet
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since 2000-05-11
Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa
9 posted 2000-05-16 10:38 AM


nice poem, very structured.  I can see why you like structure so much.  Made the poem so real and heartwarming that I had to read a second time before posting.

 

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
10 posted 2000-05-16 10:44 AM


Oh no! You found out what I look like!!!

I like this poem. Realistic, beginning to end.

blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
11 posted 2000-05-16 10:56 AM


WHB,
I just wanted to let you know that you don't get as many replies when you post a bunch all at once.  Sorry, if you felt that I was being rude.  I didn't mean to.
Alicia A. Renzelman

Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
12 posted 2000-05-16 11:04 AM


Alicia, don't worry about it! *lol*  People are responding and honestly I can't wait to post five more up here!  Thank you again, I'm going to go  look for your work, I'm a bit curious!
dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
13 posted 2000-05-17 08:52 PM


bobbly wob...i think, upon arrival to the pub, i mayve posted too many myself...     but, like you, i'm having a great time, and cant wait to post some more!  
have enjoyed reading your poems..would respond more but i'm one of few words on the spot..i like to savor a poem before i make much of a response    
take care--keep writing

dgvarner

breezeinnc
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 47
USA
14 posted 2000-05-17 10:41 PM


Nicely written first poem.
Looking for may more from you
Take care

breezeinnc

Parker
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
ON
15 posted 2000-05-18 12:26 PM


Bob, I knew there couldn't be two people with the same name writing poetry. Welcome to our family, great entry.....
So couldn't you use like a splint or something to fix that wobble.  

Parker

Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
16 posted 2000-05-18 01:01 AM


Oh now THIS is good.. ^_^
Nice writingzz.. welcome to da pub, ya wobbly poet.. *_^

I love the 6th stanza best..
Lynne

ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
17 posted 2000-05-18 05:18 AM


Welcome to the Pub, WHB!! I think this is a really good poem. Furthermore, sorry for not saying welcome when you first got here...I haven't been to the pub for a while. I regret that of course. Well, I guess I'll go catch up on the rest of the poems in the pub now.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
18 posted 2000-05-18 10:36 AM


Thanks everyone so much for the praise!!!  I really like this poem too, and it brings much joy to share it here and have it welcomed with such open arms!
blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
19 posted 2000-05-19 01:28 PM


Look for some of my work, huh?  Well, I suppose.  Just find the good ones!  LOL!  Not that there are any posted here, or anywhere, or that even exist!  LOL!  Good luck!
Alicia A. Renzelman

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