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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa 
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Silent cries all over the world. Little eyes never seeing at all. When I was made you didn't know me at all. What I'd be you'll never know. I might have been your very best friend. The things I might have done could have saved the world. Silent tears never dry on their own. Precious ears never hear at all. If you would have just let me be, I know I would've made it on my own. I'm sure I could've learned but you didn't want to try. Well, now I'm gone and it's your turn to cry. Silent screams echoing in your ears. Crazy dreams showing you your fears. What you did can never be reversed. But what about next time, will you do it again? Didn't you love me? I was part of you. Unfortunately, for me there wasn't room for two. Silent hearts never beating at all. Worlds apart that's what we were. You and I will never know just what might've happened had you let nature go. Silent hands never creating at all. Love still stands even though yours took a fall. That's okay mommy, I forgive you because I love you... |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
I'm guessing that this was written on abortion? It's very well done. I like it.  I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell. |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Awesome poem about a controversial subject. Gave me chills and made me cry for the many lost might have beens. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow, a very powerful and poignant piece on abortion. Very well written in the eyes of the unborn baby to it's mother. It was the end that really was the heartwrencher "that's okay mommy, I forgive you because I love you" now that is a powerful ending to an already bittersweet poem. Thanks for posting this, I hope that more people read this. Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
thank you very much. Yes it is about abortion. I wrote after having a philosophical debate with some army buddies and then sent it to a friend of mine who I didn't know had had one done. She wrote me back saying that this made her regret her choice. |
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patricianne Member
since 2000-05-04
Posts 66 |
What a powerful poem!! You handled the topic very well, I thought. I've also had many heated debates on this subject with many people, and your poem really touched my heart. Thank you for writing it.  |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
Thank you for the critique. This was a very touchy subject for me to write on. However, it's one subject that is dear to me. Life is precious and I don't believe in wasting it. |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
*whew*...Man, that was heart wrenching...little eyes never seeing at all...damn. Contraversial subject matter, but very well written, very well versed. Another good one! |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
thank you bob. I tried to put myself into this situation when writing this. However, I think that this is one of my better poems. Look for more soon. |
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Casonova Junior Member
since 2000-04-29
Posts 35Mays Landing |
epoet, very well done, And it is so sad but true, About three million babys are aborted each year, and just to think that i could have been one of them... great poem ! Thanks... Casonova. |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
thank you very much casonova. I appreciate the sentiment. I feel much the same way. Thank the lord that we weren't. |
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breezeinnc Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 47USA |
WOW!!! From the eyes of the unborn comes a poem filled with feeling Well Done breezeinnc |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
thank you breezeinnc. I tried hard not to get to distracted, wanted this to be as heartfelt as possible. |
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