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Casonova
Junior Member

since 2000-04-29

Posts 35
Mays Landing

0 posted 2000-05-11 11:52 PM

I stand  here today
  to make you this vow
And I just pray
  you'll understand it somehow
of course I promise to love you
  through sickness and health
And I will still cherish you
  through poverty and wealth
But On this our wedding day
what ever I may say or do
  I  don't think I could portray
How much I really love you
So I want you to know
that I'm for real
   no matter what I show
or how you may feel


I am writing a poem for my sister, which will be getting married in one month, And I wanted to write a pem for her, And this is not all of it, but I wanted to know If you all think i am on the right track, please, I would love some suggestions.

                            thanx alot!
                              Casonova

[This message has been edited by Casonova (edited 05-11-2000).]

Jon Mewett
Senior Member

since 2000-03-04

Posts 1304

1 posted 2000-05-12 06:17 AM

This looks good so far Cas please continue.

Jon

John the cat
Member

since 2000-03-23

Posts 357
England

2 posted 2000-05-12 09:15 AM

I think the happy couple will love your poem.

May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out.

Irish proverb.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-05-12 11:10 AM

This is lovely, so far! I think a poem is a wonderful wedding gift for the couple. Also, at my daughters' weddings, I wrote each a poem and had it laminated for them and also had copies made for each of the guests, rolled up like a scroll with a ribbon tied around it (in the color of the wedding party). Everyone loved them!

Denise

patricianne
Member

since 2000-05-04

Posts 66

4 posted 2000-05-12 03:26 PM

On the right track, staying away from the obvious and mushy stuff. What a wonderful keepsake too. Please post it all, if you feel like it, lots of people will want to hear it all I bet.

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

5 posted 2000-05-12 05:09 PM

~Casonova~

What a wonderful brother you are to write such a heartfelt poem for your sister. I am sure that the couple will love the sentiment!

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

6 posted 2000-05-13 02:12 AM

This is excellent so far. I am sure they will adore it.

I think its great, also, that you want to write a poem for them.

Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere

7 posted 2000-05-13 05:06 AM

Can't wait to see rest of it.. I'll be keeping my eyes open wide...

It's great so far!!

I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

Casonova
Junior Member

since 2000-04-29

Posts 35
Mays Landing

8 posted 2000-05-14 03:06 PM

Just wanted to thank you all, so very much for all of your comments, I really appreciate it, and you can be ceirtain that I will post the finished version here.. tahnks again.

Love & Hugs to all !
Casonova.

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epoet
Member

since 2000-05-11

Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa

9 posted 2000-05-14 03:13 PM

awesome poem. love this a lot really cool wedding present. great idea. please post finished product.

Casonova
Junior Member

since 2000-04-29

Posts 35
Mays Landing

10 posted 2000-05-15 01:11 PM

thanks Epoet, and yes you can be sure I will post the finished product here... thanks again..

casanova.

blackhalo
Member

since 2000-02-15

Posts 467
Denver, CO

11 posted 2000-05-15 01:19 PM

So sorry I missed this one the first time around, I tend to do that more often than not. I agree with JTC, the happy couple will absolutly love the poem. Let us know how it turns out, and tell your sister best wishes!

Life defines no more than what it is you ask for.
April 20, 2000
Alicia A. Renzelman

Casonova
Junior Member

since 2000-04-29

Posts 35
Mays Landing

12 posted 2000-05-15 05:56 PM

thanks alicia, for your response, And I have already told my sister about PIP, and how great you all are.. Thanks again.

Casonova

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