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another captured clown...

Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...

0 posted 2000-05-11 01:56 AM

the Clown

My clown is crying again, Mother
why is he always so sad?
Aren't clowns supposed to laugh
tell jokes, fall down, and be glad?

Why does my clown cry, Mother
isn't he happy living here alone?
His tears make his face so ugly
can't he just pretend this is home?

My clown is drinking again, Mother
why do you let him do this to me?
He is supposed to keep me laughing
but he's always crying to be free.

Will you make him stop it, Mother
his sobs make me sad and afraid.
Won't you fix my poor, broken clown
make him be happy, make him be brave?

My clown is crying again, Mother
please make him dance and smile.
My clown is being a bad, bad clown
Mother, please put him away for awhile.

10/95

bleeding...

"Tis ink coming from his arm,
Captain!"

PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30

Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon

1 posted 2000-05-11 02:31 AM

How sad....love you Bro

Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

2 posted 2000-05-11 05:28 AM

This is excellent writing using the clown as symbolism. Even though it is sad, I love it.

Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04

Posts 1304

3 posted 2000-05-11 08:52 AM

Bleeding this is sad but magnificent,a lovely desolate feel to it.

Jon

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 2000-05-11 12:26 PM

This is excellent, Daniel! Very well done!

Denise

blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15

Posts 467
Denver, CO

5 posted 2000-05-11 01:29 PM

Very sad, but symbolic. Good one, Daniel.

Life defines no more than what it is you ask for.
April 20, 2000
Alicia A. Renzelman

Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...

6 posted 2000-05-12 02:37 PM

thanks for the imput, my friends...
i was wondering what it was about this that
made me wonder...symbolism.
huh, and i could have had a v8!
thanks again,

bleeding...

"Tis ink coming from his arm,
Captain!"

Alle'cram
Senior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 1816
Texas

7 posted 2000-05-12 03:19 PM

great piece of work! So sad.

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