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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2000-05-10 09:24 PM


aka/Black Lace
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I hid my eyes
Each time I smiled
Veiled and trusted
Though your heart
Could have at any time
Been obliterated by a no
Or even by a yes.
You made excuses when there weren't any
And I listened because
You remained intriguing.
You left but you remained
You left again but you still remain.
While my eyes seek their haven
Behind my arduous veils,
I smile once in a while
To fill myself with the mystery of you.
And when you cross my mind,
I cross my fingers
In hopes that I don't go mad.
Where are you Prince?
I'm still dancing for you.
Swirling my veils,
Laces trailing,
Shrouds wrapped,
Voice silent,
And eyes screaming from beneath their cover.




 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

© Copyright 2000 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
Jon Mewett
Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

1 posted 2000-05-11 09:06 AM


This is very exotic and mysterious with it's veils and all.

Sort of eastern in feel.

I like it

Jon

epoet
Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa
2 posted 2000-05-11 11:35 AM


intense very intense.  can feel the emotion coming though wonder what motivated you to write this.

 

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-05-11 12:06 PM


This is excellent, Temptress! Very nice!

Denise

blackhalo
Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
4 posted 2000-05-11 01:50 PM


I agree with epoet, very intense.  Nice work!
Alicia

Moonlight Romeo
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since 2001-09-10
Posts 982
The heart of you
5 posted 2002-05-16 02:39 AM


I wonder if you've found him, for your eyes are no longer hidden.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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