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twinsgd
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since 2000-02-13
Posts 416
Ontario,Canada

0 posted 2000-05-10 02:04 AM


Please forgive the lack of distinction in the opening......but then, when one is not very distinctive....lol


I am who I am and I long to be set free
I wonder when I look , do I ever really see.
I hear the cacaphony of words on the wires.
I see the transition as lifetimes expire.
I want to make a difference , not just to be.
I am who I am and I long to be set free.

I pretend that I can soar high up above the clouds.
I feel no one will hear so I scream so very loud.
I touch the very heavens , so far away from me.
I worry am I tied down ,like a weeping willow tree
I cry for all the earthbound ,trying just to be.
I am who I am and I long to be set free.

I understand that evolution is leaving me behnd.
I say who cares for that , I'm slowly going blind
I dream of seeing clearly, all that I missed before.
I try to listen better, run it by me just once more.
I hope to be forgiven for simply being me.
I am who I am and I long to be set free.

Jack
Sorry folks I think i missed the point here,but it is late and I think i'll let it stand.



© Copyright 2000 Jack - All Rights Reserved
Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
1 posted 2000-05-10 02:31 AM


Jack..   I think you got the point perfectly.  It's not about what others want you to write in the poem, but about you.  And that's all.  Challenge very well met!  I really like this.  

 I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

2 posted 2000-05-10 10:27 AM


Hey Jack

I havn't seen you around lately,I missed your input.

Now if I may say so this is one of your best that I've read recently.

You hit the target smack bang centre here,I like the repeated refrain.

I am who I am and I long to be set free.

That to me is very nice indeed.

Regards

Jon

John the cat
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 357
England
3 posted 2000-05-10 05:45 PM


I agree with Jon. Good one. I don't think you should seek forgiveness for who you are or what you are. You should rejoice in it.
freckles
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since 2000-02-12
Posts 160
Virginia USA
4 posted 2000-05-25 10:01 PM


Jack--You are who you are....and I wouldn't have it any other way!!  Another beautiful poem here; thank you for taking (and meeting, I might add) the challenge.

 "Unto thine own self be true, and it must follow as the night, the day; thou cans't not be false to any man."---Shakespeare

childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
5 posted 2000-05-25 10:27 PM


Don't know how I missed this.  I agree with the others Jack, rejoice in all that you are!!!!  I think you met the challenge well.

 ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is....
Black Eagle
Oglala Sioux holy man


Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
6 posted 2000-05-26 07:35 AM


I also feel you met this challenge well, being ourselves is the best we can be for anyone else.  
twinsgd
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since 2000-02-13
Posts 416
Ontario,Canada
7 posted 2000-05-28 10:56 PM


Such kind words
Thank you all , I do appreciate your reading and comments.

Jack

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
8 posted 2000-05-28 11:36 PM


i enjoyed this..very good concept--being who you are, without apologies or explanations..thats a great way to be!

 "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner

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