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breezeinnc
Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 47
USA

0 posted 2000-05-06 10:33 PM


Separated

Your heart becones me
and I take a step forward
hesitate
only to step back

I console my heart
and it consoles me
for even though I want to
I cannot be with you

Since we have been apart
Fame and fortune
have been mine
but losing you has meant
that I have nothing

Those were the days
when we swore we'ed never part
You were my day
as well as my night
You reached out through space
and we touched.

And now I can feel you
like a rainbow
beautiful colourful misty
so near yet so far
stretched into eternity
and much as a dream
and my heart cries



© Copyright 2000 Samir - All Rights Reserved
Jon Mewett
Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

1 posted 2000-05-07 06:34 AM


Yep Breeze to have the love of someone thats the ticket.
You can't put a price on it.

Nicely written

Jon

Wikket
Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA
2 posted 2000-05-07 09:44 AM


Your poem almost mirrors my last relationship.  Just goes to show you that sometimes, when you think your emotions are so right, they end up being so wrong.  Oh well, how's that saying go?!?!

'Better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all...'  

Maybe someday I'll believe it!!!  

Take Care *huggle*,
~~Jamie  


 "I keep breaking all the promises
That I keep making to myself
You'd think by now that I'd be over this
Instead I'm feeling sorry for myself
So why does everything seem desperate now?
I should be feeling so alive
But it feels like something's missing
Something's wrong somehow
It feels like something deep inside has died..."
--Stabbing Westward

Meg
Junior Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 12
Manila, Philippines
3 posted 2000-05-07 10:24 AM


oh, i can relate so much to the poem ... i really liked it ... hope you can post more .. i'm looking forward to read more poems from you.
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

4 posted 2000-05-07 10:32 PM


This is so touching. I could feel the longing in it. Very well expressed!

Denise

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
5 posted 2000-05-08 01:31 AM


Mmm.. so sad Breeze.. but, if we never have sad times, how can we tell when we are truly happy, huh? ^_^ well, nicely written..

Lynne

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
6 posted 2000-05-10 06:08 PM


This is very well written, and very sad.
breezeinnc
Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 47
USA
7 posted 2000-05-13 08:31 PM


Thank you everyone
Something that happened in the past. But again better loved than never at all. How true.

breezeinnc

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
8 posted 2000-05-14 12:48 PM


Hat's off to you.. This is wonderful.  

 I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

DosPeros
Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 40

9 posted 2000-05-14 05:55 AM


Nicely done.


 When man is born he crys. When he has cryed enough he dies.:-

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