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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Nothing Don't see anything here Dusty, old, deserted place Whatever was here has gone a long time ago Left nothing behind But dust A lot of useless dust, Ripped up pages from a book Where's the cover? Even that has been taken Don't see anything worth anything here Gotta leave Gotta get out One question Can you get out of your own mind? |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
Hi Joy!! Very Good descriptive usage here, It brought thoughts of seclusion, desertion, abandonment and Isolation and, the ending was very surprising because it was a good question... Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Your words create a vivid picture in my mind...this is a poem with a very clever twist at the end....I hope you no longer have the need to escape your mind. Rather stay there and draw from it some more beautiful poetry! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Joy, Interesting poem. "Can you get out of your own mind?" Yes, but you have to clear out those cobwebs first.  ~Gene |
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