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Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois

0 posted 2000-04-20 11:45 PM


Daddy,why do you always betray?
I hate things you do,i hate things you say.
Daddy,i think you must beleive you're God,
that's your only fault in an otherwise flawless facade.
When i'm with you,you "act" so kind,
treat me like the only important thing to you.
I'm sorry daddy,i'll NEVER beleive that's true.
Because when i leave you start with your wild accusations again,
You must see this as some kind of game to win.
I know your purpose,i know your mission,
it's a hard life for my mother,you're wishin'.
If you really loved me you'd see,
what you're doing is making it hard for me.
I can't love you,so don't expect me to,
it's a bad thing to say about my father,but true.



 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

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ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-04-21 06:47 AM


This is a very sad poem...I am very sorry for you and hope things get better for you.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie



 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
2 posted 2000-04-21 02:21 PM


Oh my, this is very sad, I hope one day things get easier   You did a great job expressing your emotions in this poem.
Gene
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
3 posted 2000-04-21 02:28 PM


This is pretty sad, but it's good to get these things out. Hope he's listening.

~Gene

PrincessPoet
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since 2000-04-15
Posts 133
Long Beach, Calif.
4 posted 2000-04-21 10:51 PM



Unfortunately, my kids father is the same way
I hope he gets the message also.
And, it is hard I know but, don't allow yourself to harbor a grudge.


 Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up.
-Yoruba Proverb

Poetry & Friendship,
PrincessPoet


Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
5 posted 2000-04-22 03:31 AM


well, I can't say anything to make things better, I know.. and, I'm sorry this poem was written, well, sorry it had to be written, but princess is right, a grudge isn't a good thing to have, but perhaps instead, you could pity your father, that he does not understand what he is doing, and behaves in such a manner that others think ill of him.. pity him because he has this fault, but don't hate him... never hate anyone.. no matter what they've done.. "treat others as you would have them treat you.." <-- this is a wise saying.. although, easier said than done.. even if someone does not heed this, does not mean you cannot.. hey, swamp? read my poem, EVER AFTER.. think of it, as though it were written for you, for it is true for you as well..

expressed well...
Lynne


[This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 04-22-2000).]

rich-pa
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since 2000-02-07
Posts 317
New Orleans, Louisiana
6 posted 2000-04-22 03:40 AM


an accurate portrayal of a sorrowful reality my dear, i thought the poem was great

rich-pa

 "freedom is just another word for nothing left to lose..." -janis joplin

twinsgd
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since 2000-02-13
Posts 416
Ontario,Canada
7 posted 2000-04-22 08:54 PM


I agree with rich-pa
Last two lines , it is very unfortunate but the truth is the truth S.F.
this is courageous writing.

Jack

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
8 posted 2000-04-26 06:29 PM


Thank you all for your comments =] It is a very sad situation. My father is incredibly pyschotic,and i'm not just saying that beause i'm a teenager =P I can't love him,but at the same time i can't hate him,i bear him no grudge,and as lynne says,i pity him. He's deffinately pitiful....oh well,got to make the best of a sad situtaion and keep on keepin' on as a son once said =]thanks again


swamp


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

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