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Gene
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since 2000-01-23
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Colorado, USA

0 posted 2000-04-20 03:20 PM



And So Shall I Remain

A blade of grass has grown
Where once a spot of blood did fade.
From it a seed of life has sewn,
And will give yield to yet another blade.  
For, he who lies within this grave,
And who’s blood it is that stain,
Has given more than the life he gave.
For more or less, so shall I remain.

Unto death, is life renewed for all,
It feeds the soil that grows the plants,
That feed all creatures big and small,
From elephants to tiny ants.
For, knowing this in some small way,
My life will not have been in vain.
So, in my death, I’ll live each day,
And, so shall I remain.

______

~Gene


© Copyright 2000 Gene M. - All Rights Reserved
ESP
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since 2000-01-25
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Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-04-20 03:36 PM


Wow Gene!!! This is a great poem! A fresh approach on the circle of life theory...nice to know that no one lives in vain, isn't it?
Hey, I am the first to reply!!! Wow!! That's the first time I get this honour! Ok, better submit this before someone sneaks in before me! Great job Gene!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie



 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Munda
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2 posted 2000-04-20 03:51 PM


Yes I agree, great poem about the circle of life. Love it Gene !

Jon Mewett
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3 posted 2000-04-20 04:04 PM


Gene this is so good.

Jon

Poet deVine
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4 posted 2000-04-20 04:36 PM


Excellent!!! One of your best...  
kaile
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5 posted 2000-04-20 06:28 PM


breath-taking,refreshing and interesting perspective

A valuable gem~
My presence inspires joy~
My ashes enrich the earth

i tried to write this senyru for you but unfortunately,i can't squeeze what i want to say in 5 syllables in the third line.. ")

may i ask a flavour?if you have time,pls look at my post "Paradox(an attempt at a Zen Haiku) and give your comments....this is the first time i have tried to write a deep senyru and i am not too sure whether i have done it right....
thanx ")

twinsgd
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since 2000-02-13
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6 posted 2000-04-20 09:54 PM


A beauty to read Gene and most interesting pespective.
Really liked this

Jack

Gene
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since 2000-01-23
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Colorado, USA
7 posted 2000-04-21 03:03 PM


Thanks Eveyone, for your kind replies. I think I'll have this engraved on my tombstone someday. Thanks kaile, for the senryu.

~Gene

PrincessPoet
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since 2000-04-15
Posts 133
Long Beach, Calif.
8 posted 2000-04-21 10:57 PM



Nicely done & Well thought out


 Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up.
-Yoruba Proverb

Poetry & Friendship,
PrincessPoet


Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
9 posted 2000-04-22 03:13 AM


Well, gene, this poem is.. geez, it is just so AMAZING!! This is beautiful.. no, I can't think of a word, that describes this poem, because I like it so much... such a ... poem. ^_^  may I keep a copy of this poem? I like it a lot.. very ... !!! (there is that word which I can't find again, the one to describe this poem.. ^_^)

Lynne

rich-pa
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since 2000-02-07
Posts 317
New Orleans, Louisiana
10 posted 2000-04-22 03:15 AM


i dug it yo, good portrayal of the life/death cycle there.

rich-pa

 "freedom is just another word for nothing left to lose..." -janis joplin

Gene
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
11 posted 2000-04-22 06:52 PM


Princess -- rich-pa -- Thanks much, glad you liked it.  

Lynne -- Thanks, so much. I'd be honored if you keept a copy.  

~Gene

passing shadows
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12 posted 2004-12-25 10:39 AM


thanks for the boost
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