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The Burden

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 04-17-2000 04:00 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

The Burden

Into the darkened Cathedral she plod
With sin-weary heart and a spirit downtrod
Seeking atonement and love from her God

Then making her way down the aisle alone
As light from the alter before her was shone
A path to forgiveness with steps of her own

A life full of sin of a soul gone astray
She meant to confess as she entered that day
A penance of sin she was willing to pay

With a trembling hand and a faltering step
Up to the alter she cautiously crept
And as she approached it she openly wept

Before she could possibly utter a sound
She discovered forgiveness on that holy ground
Like a pilgrim whose new Promised Land had been found

She had carried her sins like an old albatross
Forgetting redemption was satan’s own loss  
The day that a Prophet was hung on the cross

Year after year, every Easter went by
The meaning and value she’d always deny
And now she remembered the Who and the Why

A tear from her spirit still wet on her face
She was freed of the burden of sin and disgrace
As her past was wiped out by His Heavenly Grace

As she knelt down and prayed at the feet of her Lord
His Love and His Grace was to be her reward
And into her soul was abundantly poured

Upon simple honesty character’s built
Forgiveness comes swift when admitting your guilt

Elizabeth Santos
© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
blackhalo
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1 posted 04-17-2000 04:39 PM       View Profile for blackhalo   Email blackhalo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blackhalo's Home Page   View IP for blackhalo

Awesome!  You have no earthly idea how much that means to me, but I probably, once again, miss-interperated!
luv,
hippichick!
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 04-17-2000 05:16 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Alicia, You make me laugh. You may interpret a verse any way you please. That is the beauty of poetry. And I thank you for reading and responding to my poems, even though at this time I am unable to keep up with the reading of others
Thank you so much
Liz
twinsgd
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3 posted 04-17-2000 10:37 PM       View Profile for twinsgd   Email twinsgd   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for twinsgd

Liz...A beautiful poem through and through....but the last two lines are fabulous and a wonderful finish for this piece.

Jack
LindaMac
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4 posted 04-18-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for LindaMac   Email LindaMac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LindaMac

You are incredible...are you publishing a book? You should...!

I loved this. Honesty and forgiveness go hand in hand - what a revelation!
Yu Lan
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5 posted 04-18-2000 02:49 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Aah, I always enjoy reading your poetry, Liz.. this is beautiful.. and you are so right.. forgiveness only comes when you admitt guilt.. and is readily given, by those who you really need it from.. but.. always that first step.. admitting.. so hard sometimes.. ^_^ I love this poem! Thank you for sharing it..

Lynne
Jon Mewett
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6 posted 04-18-2000 02:54 AM       View Profile for Jon Mewett   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jon Mewett

A tear from her spirit still wet on her face.

Deep forgivness indeed.

That line captures the whole of this poem for me.

Nice writing Liz,

Jon
Lost Dreamer
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7 posted 04-18-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Elizabeth, This poem is exquisite, your message is wonderful, I love it!  
Munda
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8 posted 04-18-2000 03:23 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Beautiful poem Liz.
Gene
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9 posted 04-18-2000 04:21 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Liz,

Beautifully done as usual.  

~Gene
Dennis L. White
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10 posted 04-18-2000 06:53 PM       View Profile for Dennis L. White   Email Dennis L. White   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dennis L. White

Liz,
   What a beautiful story of another prodigals return, Sweet and spiritual! Thank you for this thoughtful post!
                              Dennis :^)
ESP
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11 posted 04-28-2000 05:20 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

So true!!

Upon simple honesty character’s built
Forgiveness comes swift when admitting your guilt

This poem is really wonderful, how could I have managed to miss it when it was first posted I do not know!! I love it!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
John the cat
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12 posted 04-28-2000 06:02 AM       View Profile for John the cat   Email John the cat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for John the cat

As always Elizabeth, superb. I am so pleased I saw this one come round again.

 May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out.

Irish proverb.
Denise
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13 posted 04-28-2000 09:05 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Absolutely beautiful, Elizabeth. Full of truth and inspiration!

Denise
passing shadows
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a touching story, a great message of wisdom
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15 posted 11-24-2009 02:31 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Time has not dimmed this poem - it only shines stronger as it waited to be found again.

Liz, you write keepers.

A
 
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