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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand 
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Baby Moonlight, Filters through the curtains, Kissing her bedspread. Loving hands, Smooth a wrinkle from her sheets, Caress her tiny face. Her eyes are closed, A smile plays on her lips. She sleeps in silence, A tiny porcelain doll, Lying with her teddy bears. Any criticism is welcome too.. ^_^ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Babies are so precious. So is this poem! Denise |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Smell so pure and fresh~ Blessed chuckle as you touch me~ I love you,baby! allow me to write this haiku for you  ")this poem is excellent....i too love bables myself...little bundle of joy and innocence they are BTW,if you are still interested,pls refer to the post "A Tribute to passionate poets and a Cinquain challenge" looking 4ward to read your cinquain!!  |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
Absolutely beautiful Lynne No criticism from here....I came to read what you wrote, and thank you for sharing your thoughts. Jack |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
It's BABY FRESH, Nice Poem  Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very nice poem I enjoyed it also In case you are not aware we have a Critical Analysis forum if you feel you want to have advise, people go there that know how to critic a poem, and people post there who desire to have their poems criticed. |
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