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gumpno
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since 2000-03-20
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0 posted 2000-04-16 12:46 PM


A ROSE

U are as soft as that rose,
and i hold u in my hands with the most care,
but sometimes u show me your spines
and i dont wear a glove
so sometimes my hands are beginning to bleed
but that is not only your fault
i wasnt carefully enough
and u cant always keep your spines at the inside
but i will never wear a glove
cuz otherwise i cant touch u.

Here is a rose for u honey


 

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ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-04-16 01:04 PM


This is lovely and I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing it with us!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie



 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Chico
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 67

2 posted 2000-04-16 02:59 PM


Gumpno,
I Really like the Image you portray here alot, It has and awsome message, but I think if you put a little more time and effort into it, It could be much more powerful. But please Understand that I am no great poet, and that this is just my opinion.. take care now...

twinsgd
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since 2000-02-13
Posts 416
Ontario,Canada
3 posted 2000-04-16 03:29 PM


I like your poem gumpno
Hope honey likes her rose

Jack

Mrobi3543
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 29
Philadelphia, PA
4 posted 2000-04-16 04:09 PM


This poem is too true...you can't fully enjoy a rose without the risk of the thorns.



I like it.

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
5 posted 2000-04-17 06:09 AM


Aah, have to agree with Chico on this one.. nice poem, but not terribly strong.. I am sure you could improve it.. I do like it though.. ^_^

Lynne

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