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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand 
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Sacred Serenity Sweet moonlight, kissing cool waters, As the lake lazily twiddles its thumbs. Starry skies match starry eyes; I am dreamily delighted by serenity surrounding me. Little creatures skitter cautiously Through overgrown undergrowth behind me. A candy coated breeze Giggles amongst the daisies in the grass, And little, naughty dandelions, Blow fluffy seeds into my eyes. This is my sacred place, and my sacred time. A vision in my mind. |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Grr... I am feeling unusually cold upon reading this poem. So lonely, so desolate, eh, Lynne. your style again - no second character. Jõmes |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Whereas James feels cold and desolate, I come away feeling warm and wearing a smile. Even if it's only a place in thought, it sounds delightful. I especially like: "giggles amongst the daisies in the grass." ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
I agree with Kim A Pleasant private place......delightful. Jack |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
We all have a sacred place. Yours is delightful. ~Gene |
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Mrobi3543 Junior Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 29Philadelphia, PA |
I wish I could find this place...it's a place I've been looking for for a long time. It sounds great. My favorite line was how the lake twiddles its thumbs... |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is lovely, beautiful sacred place. I love your poetry, Lynne! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
i think i've died and gone to a place where someone else writes like me, this reminds me of some of my own pieces, nature and serenity is quite a popular theme for me, s i absolutley loved this piece, keep it up! rich-pa |
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Ariadne New Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 8 |
wow, i really like the graceful style of this. Good job! -tara |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx! James.. perhaps u are not wearing a sweatshirt? lol..hehe.. j/k.. Childomine.. aah.. yes that is the feeling it was meant to give.. rich-pa... I shall have to read some more of yours then, eh? ^^ thanx twins, gene.. Lizzie.. I like yours too.. what I have read of it, anyway.. tara.. I shall have to read some of your work.. don't think i have seen any.. ^_^ Lynne [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 04-16-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very pretty! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A wonderful poem, A wonderful talent! I'll be reading you Liz |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
I have a place like this too =] I like the way you describe your's it's so fresh and in tune with nature =] write on!! Lol  swampie And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Hey, thanx everyone! ^_^ I'm flattered (hehe.. or flattened.. one or the other, eh? ) |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This poem is so delightful, your descriptions were fabulous, wonderful place you have there in your mind. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
thanks LD.. ^_^ Yeah, i'd like to think so.. *_^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
hehe, come on.. Lynne.. it's disgusting. hehe.. just kidding.. you are online?.. hehe I am still to have my tea.. haha. Nice sleep tonight. thanks for your comments for my poems.. but you cannot vote here though.. haha.. and I am not going to place these two poems in Voices on the web. 'cause they are up to no good. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
*Sob* the picture u've painted pisses mi off cosh I can't be there! *S* tat's not true, u're a darling Lynne. love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
Double dipping, Lynne? still great hugz, D bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Yu Lan beautifully written, lovely feelings. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Hey!! I already replied to these!! Oh, bother, my computer must have been playing dumb again.. *_^ Anyway, thank you all (again, hehe ) your all so generous with your praises(hehe, 'cept James.. =P Hey what was disgusting?! What did I say? **tries to look innocent.. buuuuut fails..** hehe..okok.. well u know I didn't mean that..) -Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
YuLan~ The alliteration in this piece is captivating. Wonderfully cascading with serenity. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
woops, I'm posting twice here!! ^_^ Well, twice as many thanx then Marge! ^_^ seeeeee beloooooow... hehe.. Luv.. [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 07-31-2000).] |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you Marge. ^_^ 'cascadin...' 'captivating..' well, thank you!! ^_^ Lot's o' love, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Such a beautiful serene place should be cherished. Great job. I felt like I was there. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you kelieth... well I am glad you did, 'coz it's a great place 2 be.. hehe.. Thanx.. -Lynne |
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