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sKiTtLeS
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since 2000-04-12
Posts 113
wisconsin, u.s.a.

0 posted 2000-04-14 05:34 PM


Would you like to play a game with me?
I'll give you my heart, but I'll keep the key.

No more chances this girl's taking,
Her heart is too fragile to deal with such breaking.

The boys are the ones that like to play,
"You would if you loved me", they tend to say.

Poor little girl, confused and alone,
Looking for love that she never has known.

She gives in to the boy, and he steals her heart.
Meanwhile she's thinking, they never will part.

Poor little girl, losing the game.
For she doesn't know the rules aren't the same.

The boy walks away, the girl starts to cry.
But her head she knows, she must hold high.

Never again will she let a boy win,
With love and trust ONLY, they will be let in.

Would you like to play a game with me?
I'll give you my heart, but I've lost the key.

 "Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened."
-the words of a friend

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Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
1 posted 2000-04-14 05:59 PM


Nah, you just hid the keys.   Wait for the right person.....he'll give you three keys. Love, trust and honesty. Once they are offered you may accept.  
rich-pa
Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317
New Orleans, Louisiana
2 posted 2000-04-14 06:26 PM


i know many friends who locked off their hearts completely after some idiot guy hurt 'em...at least the character in this one learned to use trust and love to let them in....good poem

rich-pa

 "freedom is just another word for nothing left to lose..." -janis joplin

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
3 posted 2000-04-15 02:48 AM


Hey.. that's what I said too.  But there are guys out there that will take the time to either give you the keys to their hearts or help you find the key to yours.  Keep looking.     Love the poem, btw.

 MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU,
MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK
MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE
THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS
AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN,
MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND

Irish Blessing

Strosek
Member
since 2000-04-08
Posts 61
Fourways, Gauteng, South Africa
4 posted 2000-04-15 03:15 AM


Great poem, I'm one of the guys that offers my own key first, so I've experianced that from the other side of the line. But one day you'll find that speacial person who will hhold the key to your heart with pride, and cherish it till the day he dies.

 May the light of day always shine during the darkest of nights.


Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
5 posted 2000-04-15 06:32 AM


nice poem.. I like the '2 line stanzas'.. is there a name for this style of poetry?

Lynne

childomine
Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
6 posted 2000-04-15 09:15 AM


Skittles this is very good.  As Munda said, someone will come along with the right
key(s).

 ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is....
Black Eagle
Oglala Sioux holy man


achicade
Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 66
Marietta, GA USA
7 posted 2000-04-15 09:25 AM


I like this very much.  The style with two lines is wonderful, as Lynne noted. I hope you find the key.

 God bless you all. :-)
-debbie-

sKiTtLeS
Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 113
wisconsin, u.s.a.
8 posted 2000-04-15 03:41 PM


Thank you all. I'm still looking for the key, but with a stronger self-defense it's getting easier.

Oh yeah, about the 2-line style.  I don't know if there's a name for it, I was just feeling this sort of rhythm when writing it.

Thanks again, especially for the support.

sKiTtLeS~

PrincessPoet
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since 2000-04-15
Posts 133
Long Beach, Calif.
9 posted 2000-04-15 09:31 PM


Skittles, Hi !

       Good Rhythm, and I can relate but, remember your Prince awaits, sometimes you have to go on about life and let your Prince find you hold onto your keys as long as you can before you share.

Poetry & Frienship,
PrincessPoet


ESP
Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
10 posted 2000-04-16 03:46 AM


This is a lovley poem...the right guy will come along at the right time. Just be strong and look after your keys carefully!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie



 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Chico
Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67

11 posted 2000-04-16 03:33 PM


sKiTtLeS,
  Hey this Is so true, and I have experienced what you point out here, But I have learned to keep both my heart, and my key, until somone comes along with a key that matches mine. Then And then only Will I allow that person to try to unlock my heart, and if there key works, and gets them inside the first door, I will give them my key, so they can have full access to all the rooms inside my heart.. take care now, and I hope you find the person, that, as someone already said, will treasure it, and guard it with his life.  Smile !


                    -Chico

[This message has been edited by Chico (edited 04-16-2000).]

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
12 posted 2000-04-18 12:51 PM


LOVE IT!! This is an awesome poem!! I how it's compared and desribed.

swamp


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

blackhalo
Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
13 posted 2000-04-18 12:44 PM


I know that someday, the key will be regained, and nothing is ever lost forever!  My favorite saying was once, guys aren't worth it!
Alicia A. Renzelman

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
14 posted 2004-12-25 10:20 AM



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