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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
The Soul’s Harlequin The mask of parenthood is on my face Severe, strict, without compassion But I feel a tingle crawling up from my toes Slowly finding its way up my spine Changing into high waves of pleasure Towards my mouth, where crystal bubbles Burst into the air, spreading sounds of a grin Inviting for more, larger bubbles The soul’s harlequin is playing Twinkling stars appear in my eyes And rainbows explode alll around me While the sun bursts out on my face There’s no escape from this escapee I’m lost in seas of laughter Roaring laughter fills the air Conquering all emotions but one The soul's harlequin is playing Munda  The assignment in the Poetry Workshop was "extended metaphor" this time. Oh dear, I think I accidently wrote a free verse ! |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Munda, Free verse, extended metaphor, does it matter? This was good no matter what it was meant to be. Lots of smiles.Joy |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
Oh so familiar...defeat of discipline. Very good poem Munda. Jack |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Munda, I don't know what extended metaphor is, but I still like this. I see three rhymes, BTW. ~Gene |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Nothing like choking back the laughter when trying to be the strict sensible parent...been there!! This is very well written, Munda! Denise |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Munda, This was writtten so well, disciplines' firm resolve, eroded by compassion! Great Piece! Dennis :^) |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Sometimes it's hard to keep in mind what we set out to do.. And sometimes it's those times we accomplish the most. Very beautiful... MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU, MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN, MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND Irish Blessing |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Munda, Excellent job, and I noticed your free verse and laughed when I got to the end and saw you did also. I know you and your wall with free verse, see concentration was somewhere else and it allowed you to express without the rhyme as much as usual. I knew you could master anything you put your mind too, just because you are you. |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Excellent piece here Munda. I enjoyed this a lot. Jon |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
Extended metaphor? Free Verse? Great words I know..these are they. May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thanks everybody for reading and replying.  For the ones who don't know: I tried to write free verse for the Workshop and seemed unable. Now I wrote one accidently.  |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
i absolutely loved this one! it was great and full of vivid detail...accidental free verse is good! it means you are becoming an all around writer! rich-pa "freedom is just another word for nothing left to lose..." -janis joplin |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Munda, Accidentally on purpose. great job! But can you explain an extended metaphor? I think I've written some, but I'm not sure. ~Gene |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
rich-pa - Thank you, what a nice thing to say. Gene - LOL follow this link to Nan's mysterious world /pip/Forum22/HTML/000130.html |
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