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Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
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Illinois

0 posted 2000-04-09 11:13 PM


I feel bitter,i feel cold
it's a shame this feeling's old.
Twelve days i did wait for you,
three more did i implore you
& wait & wait i did some more,
i strained my ears,i walked the floor.
Yet still i hear not your signal,
nor your footstep on the shingle.
Have you betrayed me??¿
With your love,have you slayed me??¿
I bid you no ill fortune,
but please just end this torture.
Will you kindly now appear??¿
Or will we never again meet here??¿
The questions,they come & go,
the answers truely you should know.
Along your path have you been harmed??¿
Or by some other,are you charmed??¿
Do you love me,do you know??¿
Do you hate me,would it show??¿
No evil would i bear you,
but with no other would i share you.
I simply wish to know.

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 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson


[This message has been edited by Swåmp¤Faerÿie (edited 04-10-2000).]

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John the cat
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 357
England
1 posted 2000-04-10 02:47 AM


The pain of not knowing is conveyed with stark realism for me in this. I feel for you.

 May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out.

Irish proverb.

ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2000-04-10 05:16 AM


Powerful piece  of work here! I too can feel the pain and fear of not knowing that leaps out in your words.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is a rainbow of delight."

twinsgd
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since 2000-02-13
Posts 416
Ontario,Canada
3 posted 2000-04-10 06:15 PM


WOW you sure make your point clear with this one S. F......Really good poem.

Jack

Denise
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4 posted 2000-04-10 08:52 PM


Not knowing is the worst feeling of all. Great poem!

Denise

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
5 posted 2000-04-11 12:45 PM


thanks everyone!! =]

swamp


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
6 posted 2000-04-11 07:53 AM


The pain shows in your words.. Gripping yet honest.  It shows a humans true feelings.  Wonderful work.

 MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU,
MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK
MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE
THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS
AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN,
MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND

Irish Blessing

Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

7 posted 2000-04-11 09:44 AM


Hi Swampola

I agree with what's been said before.

A very expressive piece.

Jon

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
8 posted 2000-04-11 09:50 AM


excellent writing here in this poem, I hope you receive your answers soon.  
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