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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
Vision I glide through your door like a thief in the night, No need for alarm, no need to take flight, I'm here just to watch an incredible sight, A vision asleep in her bed. I creep to your bedside and stare at your face, My temperature rises, my pulse starts to race, Your lips with my fingers gently I trace, My vision asleep in her bed. Leaning over I feel your breath on my cheek, The sound of your breathing so mild and so meek, I suddenly stiffen as the bed it doth creak under my vision asleep in her bed. I smile as I watch your lovely lips part, I feel my blood flow, the pump of my heart, My lips they join yours a kiss to impart, To my Princess asleep on her bed. May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Cat this is beautiful and romantic. I think this is my favorite of yours so far. ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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tom Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 90s/w penna u.s.a. |
John T.C. wonderful poem,to bad we live in a time when this would be looked at as other then romantic tom |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Very sensuous. Has a couple of different meanings. ~Gene |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful, John! Denise |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
This reads so romantically John, nice rhythm. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is lovely poem....very romantic!! Thank you for sharing it with us. Love and hugs, Lizzie  |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Cat I love this one. Great flow,great rhymes. You have read my mind I was writing a similar poem in a similar setting,I'm not sure the subject matter is the same. Watch out for it I would like to hear your reaction to it. Meantime, GREAT Jon |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
Childomine, Denise, Lizzie & Twins.....Thank you  Tom & Gene...There was only one meaning as I wrote it. Anyone who knows me will know it. Jon...Thanks, I'll look for it as I do for all your postings. May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Beautifully romantic!! |
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freckles Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 160Virginia USA |
John--WOW....did somebody turn the heat up in here? This is so romantic and beautiful. "Unto thine own self be true, and it must follow as the night, the day; thou cans't not be false to any man."---Shakespeare |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
Nicely done John...romance at it's finest! "Writing is easy. All you do is stare at a blank sheet of paper until drops of blood form on your forehead." -Gene Fowler |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Simply wonderful writing, with a heightened sense of romance. I love it! |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
Thank you I suppose I'm just an incurable old romantic May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
This is great John. Very beautiful |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
John, Soooo romantic and so beautiful. I love your vision. Sheila ...the earth and myself are of one mind. The measure of the land and the measure of our bodies are the same........... Joseph, Nez Perce Chief |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
Munda....Thank you Sheila....So do I  |
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