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JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2000-03-26 12:52 PM


Sparks flying against a midnight sky
So black
Color flashing in all directions
Splashes soaking in and disapeering beneath
the dark blanket covering the stars
A time of great joy!
No!
Not anymore
All these are are distant memories
That cannot be relived
As much as I hoped before that once
Just once
I could feel that unthinkable, unreachable
Feeling of contentment
When watching in awe the blaze of lights
On a cool, breezy summer night
With a connected, whole friendship
With the sky above.
New memories have to be created
But they will never take the place
Of those distant memories
That will always be pulling at the back of my brain
Oh, but my head doesn't realize
The flashes brilliant with red, green, blue...
Have long ago melted in a downpour of heavy rain.


Btw, I think I need a better title.  Can anyone help?
Thanks.  
Joy

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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-03-26 02:29 PM


This is so beautiful, Joy! I think the title you have is great!  

Denise

John the cat
Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357
England
2 posted 2000-03-26 02:39 PM


A beautiful poem and a title that makes one simply have to read on.
JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
3 posted 2000-03-26 03:32 PM


Really?  You like it?  Well maybe I should keep it then, it is starting to grow on me.

Joy

Gene
Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
4 posted 2000-03-26 06:11 PM


Great poem, Joy.  

I've got a title. How 'bout umm, "Melted?"

~Gene

StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
5 posted 2000-03-27 07:58 AM


This is a great  poem and I like the title too !!

 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~



Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
6 posted 2000-03-27 09:48 AM


Keep the title, and keep the memories they are a part of you and who you are today. Just find a little room in your brain and store them there under lock and key, the rest will fall in place. Great job I really enjoyed this poem.
Sasikat
Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290
St. Petersburg, FL
7 posted 2000-03-27 11:10 AM


Joy,

Great poem and title.  Never push aside your memories, but sometimes new memories outshine the old!!

Sheila


 ...the earth and myself are of one mind. The measure of the land and the measure of our bodies are the same........... Joseph, Nez Perce Chief

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