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StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas

0 posted 2000-03-23 03:48 PM


Ok two poems for the price of one click!! kind of like a before and after thing ...

~*Broken Wings*~
I wish I  could fly
But I've got broken wings
Why must we always  wish
For impossible things?

I was shot down by a hunter
He broke my wings and stole my heart
I've tried to get on with life
I'm just not sure where to start

It's no fun being on the ground
When wings once touched the sky
I would do anything...
Some one teach me once again to fly!!!


~*Chains Unbound*~
A tangle of emotions
chains unbound
smoldering embers
lost yet found
jumbled up words
a shy grin
dazzling eyes
I'm lost within
the touch of your hand
the sound of your voice
falling hard
not wanting the choice
abandoning fears
tearing down walls
surrendering willingly
to love's sweet calls
soaring in heaven
bright blue sky
thank you my love
for reminding me how to fly !!!



 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~



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William P Bussey
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since 2000-02-26
Posts 188

1 posted 2000-03-23 03:52 PM


Aint love grand...
Gene
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
2 posted 2000-03-23 07:36 PM


Two for the price of one!

These are great, Starr. I like how they go together, but what about making it into a trilogy? There could be a third one that ends with the last two lines,

And for all eternity
Together, we will fly
---

Or something like that.

~Gene


Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-03-23 07:49 PM


These are great, Starrgazer! I like Gene's idea for a third one too!

Denise

StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
4 posted 2000-03-23 08:07 PM


William- love disgusied as a great friendship but yes I'd have to agree  

Gene- trilogy idea sounds kind of neat I didn't plan on these two poems even coenciding together I wrote the first months ago and the second today  send it to my "friend" and he reminded me of the first one but hmmm trilogy maybe  who knows  

Denise- Thanks  

 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~



childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
5 posted 2000-03-23 08:12 PM


Starr - I third Genes idea for a third!  
These are absolutely beautiful.  I too like the way you tied them together.  So --  how about a third???  


 ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is....
Black Eagle
Oglala Sioux holy man


Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 2000-03-23 11:39 PM


Wow Starr!!  Double your pleasure, double the fun. . .

You always seem to have such an excellent understanding of what feelings are in your heart. . . and that's what makes your writing so excellent. . .

Okay, I want a third too!!

------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Tess
Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
7 posted 2000-03-24 01:36 AM


I enjoyed these two poems so much…the first trust broken by love. the second reaching out to trust and allow  love to lift you again.

Thanks  

Tess


 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle


Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
8 posted 2000-03-24 05:56 AM


These are great and what a good idea...a trilogy !
X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
9 posted 2000-03-24 12:33 PM


Amazing what a little word like LOVE can do! Tear you apart, lift you up.....WOW

~X~

Broken Wings
Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157
Miami, FL.
10 posted 2000-03-24 05:34 PM


Ok, you know that I LOVED them both....and the idea of a third...flying for eternity...is a great one.  


take care,
Broken Wings


 "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth."
-IYANLA VANZANT


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