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Another Heather
Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 93
Canada

0 posted 2000-03-23 03:55 AM

This one's sort of just a bunch of things jumbled together that might not make sense to anyone but me, but I thought I'd post it anyway. I'm kind of interested to see what other people get from it.

As I watch the sky and it's vacant sigh,
I realize you can't give yourself away.
The lonely see it everyday,
The wandering wonder what is waiting for them.

I want to see the child-like smiles
I yearn for the open crash of the storm
Walking the edge of a tall, tall building
I will melt away.

Freedom is a proposition
You can feel it but you'll never really
hold it comfortably.
How can you be so melancholy?
Isn't this what you thought was true?

My dear friend, we've got to live
The way life's cards are dealt.
And sometimes these things happen.
Yet words of wisdom don't always warm us;
What's right isn't always necessarily good.

But I want to be my own free spirit
Please don't tie me down
Where I am going nobody knows
But I am happy there,
I'm happy there.

"Be yourself... No matter what they say"
- Sting

Jon Mewett
Senior Member

since 2000-03-04

Posts 1304

1 posted 2000-03-23 04:28 AM

Hi

Your poem speaks to me of a yearning for something that we can never really achieve.
Freedom.

This has always been inscrutable to me 'Mans'
wanting always the unattainable.It's a mystery,but one of which you have written about well.

Jon

Sasikat
Member

since 2000-02-02

Posts 290
St. Petersburg, FL

2 posted 2000-03-23 07:33 AM

Heather,

I don't know if I got what you intended, but what I interpreted was to accept the things that are sent your way and deal with them in the ways that are right for you with a yearning for more experiences that aren't always available to us.

Sheila

...the earth and myself are of one mind. The measure of the land and the measure of our bodies are the same........... Joseph, Nez Perce Chief

William P Bussey
Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 188

3 posted 2000-03-23 11:08 AM

I enjoyed your words, I do agree with Jon however,I also detect selfesness in you theme, life is not such that we can freely go about our self satisfying way, others will always get in your way, and they have wants to, sometimes they infringe on yours...bill

David2
Member

since 2000-03-22

Posts 407

4 posted 2000-03-23 06:22 PM

I felt the freedom of your spirit of which you spoke, I thought you did a wonderful job of expressing your need to feel free and to just be. i enjoyed this piece very much,
Thanks, David2

Jonas
Senior Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 796
Oregon

5 posted 2000-03-23 07:04 PM

I like this very much Heather. I won't attempt to put a meaning to this piece as it could go in several different directions. But the last stanza is powerful. And it is something we should all hold dear as long as it does not violate the standards we have set for ourselves.

Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night.
-Edgar Allen Poe

childomine
Senior Member

since 2000-01-25

Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL

6 posted 2000-03-24 07:42 AM

I hope I get this one right Heather!

  The message I got is,  unto your ownself be true.  Whatever life has to dish out we must never let go of who we really are and the people who come into our lives need to accept us for who we are.  When we deny who we are, we extinguish the flame; the essence of our true spirit.< !signature-->

...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is....
          Black Eagle
    Oglala Sioux holy man

[This message has been edited by childomine (edited 03-24-2000).]

Another Heather
Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 93
Canada

7 posted 2000-03-25 03:12 AM

Thanks for reading everyone. I enjoyed and agree with all your interpretations but to tell you the truth, I don't really know what I was trying to say when I wrote it. It's just one of those things that I wrote without trying to make it become anything or worrying about form and pattern and all that stuff.
I'm glad some of you got something out of it anyway. Thanks again!

"Be yourself... No matter what they say"
- Sting

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