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Die In Vain
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since 2000-03-18
Posts 15
B.C., Canada

0 posted 2000-03-22 01:47 PM



FEAR


I'm running as fast as I can
Through the dark tunnel
wondering where it would end

I can't see the light beyond
Where is it? Where can it be?
Oh, NO! I hear it coming
There is nothing I can see

The loud noise is deafening
How close is it? Will it get me?

Still running, I feel it
Getting closer, and closer
It is almost upon me

I can feel it's hot breath
But I still cannot see

The light is just beyond
Faster, I go
I see the opening, there it is.

Time has run out, for the thing behind
I laugh out loud with joy
I reach the light, I turned
no creature In sight

I turned back towards the light
a smile on my face
I screamed in terror
as the hugh teeth bared down
and swallowed me.

I wake in a cold sweat
It was a dream, just a dream

Copyright © 1999 Die In Vain


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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-03-22 02:03 PM


Whew! What a nightmare that was! Great ending to this!!

Denise

JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
2 posted 2000-03-22 08:01 PM


I was caught up in your dream as I read through these lines.  Very good!  

Joy

Tess
Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
3 posted 2000-03-22 08:48 PM


I liked the way the fear in this poem gradually built up....but ended happily!!!

great poem

Tess  

 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle

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