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wonderous
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0 posted 2000-03-21 08:28 PM


i awoke last night
and watched you sleeping by my side

i longed to touch you
to lay down my head
and hear you take lifes breath

but i held myself
not wanting to awaken you

the moon drifted
out of the clouds
the stars shone down

the waves gently whispered
not wanting to awaken you

a smile transformed your face
i knew it was i who put it there
i could hold back nomore

i reached out to touch your lips
and awoke

alas 'twas i who hadn't been awake


[This message has been edited by wonderous (edited 03-21-2000).]

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childomine
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1 posted 2000-03-21 08:32 PM


Wonderous this is very good.  So often our dreams seem real.  Too bad this one wasn't more than a dream for you!

 ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is....
Black Eagle
Oglala Sioux holy man


wonderous
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2 posted 2000-03-21 08:47 PM


thanxs childo mine

there is something wrong with the last two lines
can anyone help please

Denise
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3 posted 2000-03-21 09:28 PM


Beautiful, sad poem, Wonderous. If you need to change anything just go in under the edit function on top of your poem and fix anything that you would like to.

Denise

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4 posted 2000-03-21 10:41 PM


Wonderous, indeed you have opened my eyes to your name. . . I too have seen the sleep of my love, and wondered if it was I who was sleeping. . .

Excellent, my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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