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wonderous
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since 2000-02-29
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0 posted 2000-03-13 02:04 PM


sanity returns
and i loose yet again
so i stay away
untill you need to escape into the illusion
for just this one last time
you declare your love for me
you curse fate
you dream of a future
you wish for eternity
i ask only for the present
i ask only for a few stolen moments
you put stars in my eyes
you promise me the world
and fool that i am
i believe in your words
then sanity returns
my heart is broken
and i loose yet again



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Denise
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1 posted 2000-03-13 02:41 PM


Wonderous, this is a fabulous first post! Very well done! For a title how about: 'Sanity Lost and Found' or 'I lose again' or 'Illusion'....just some suggestions! Please check your email for a special welcome from Passions!

Denise

Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

2 posted 2000-03-13 03:46 PM


You have a way with words.
I like your poem.

Jon

JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
3 posted 2000-03-13 05:23 PM


How about---Stars In My Eyes---  Although I like Denise's titles too.  I was also going to suggest--Illusion-- Up to you. Please post what you decide.

Joy

StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
4 posted 2000-03-13 05:45 PM


Welcome to Passions   very good first post  umm for some reason --Illusions-- spoke to me as well but I kinda like Joys Stars in my eyes too ...

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~



Gene
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
5 posted 2000-03-13 06:12 PM


Great poem, a little sad, but true. Welcome to the forums, wonderous.

~Gene

wonderous
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 75

6 posted 2000-03-13 06:14 PM


thanx denise, jon, joy, starr.

i guess by popular demand illusion it is
thiugh i must admit i liked stars in my eyes too.

thanxs again for a warm welcome

wonderous
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 75

7 posted 2000-03-13 06:25 PM


thanxs gene
this was written for a man i ve known since i was 13 which is half my life .
we lost contact over the years but recently got in touch over the net. we are in different countries seperated not only by thousands of miles but also by social barriers: he unfortunately is married and one of the few people around who will always honour his commitments.

Sasikat
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 290
St. Petersburg, FL
8 posted 2000-03-13 07:00 PM


Wonderous,

Welcome to the Pub. I enjoyed your poem and certainly can relate to the hurt here.  Well written and look forward to more of your posts.

Sheila

 ...the earth and myself are of one mind. The measure of the land and the measure of our bodies are the same........... Joseph, Nez Perce Chief

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
9 posted 2000-03-13 07:06 PM


A wonderful first post. Welcome to the Pub !
childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
10 posted 2000-03-13 08:07 PM


Wonderous welcome to the Pub!  I enjoyed this poem.  When love is treated as a game by one, it becomes a very painful illusion to the other. Look forward to reading more.
Another Heather
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since 2000-02-17
Posts 93
Canada
11 posted 2000-03-14 01:09 AM


This was lovely. I read it a few times and I liked  it more each time. It gave me a nice feeling of melancholy which everybody needs now and then. I look forward to reading more of your stuff

 "Be yourself... No matter what they say"
- Sting

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