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Wikket
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA

0 posted 2000-03-11 02:04 PM


I know, I know!  Haven't posted in a while and I'm probably a stranger again!  Just letting you all know I haven't dissapeared or forgotten you, I've just been entirely too busy.  Anyway, here's one I just wrote about my recent break-up (go figure)! I just needed to write this to let it go.  Hope you all don't mind a little anger and frustration!  --Jamie  


I saw you before
I saw you sleeping
Dreaming of the times
When you took me for granted

I saw you before
I saw you shiver
Perspiring heavily
Scared that you'd lost me

I saw you before
I saw you drink
Shouting to your friends
Words you thought I'd never hear

I saw you before
I saw you laugh
Snickering at the truth
You thought you'd kept from me

I saw you before
I saw you slip
Looking for another lie
So that you could keep us together

I saw you after
I saw your ignorance
Knowing you had lost me forever
And thinking that you'd feel okay

I saw you after
I saw your grief
And you know what pal?
You deserve every minute of it

Lessons are learned in the game of love
Through trial and regret
So that someday all of us will see
Our Soulmate when we've met

by,

Jamie Hartman
2000

--There...positive ending!  




 "You make it hard to breathe
It's as if I'm suffocating
And when you're next to me
I can feel you're heart beat through my skin
It makes me sad to think this could all be for nothing
I wish there was a way
A way for you to see inside me
I've never felt this way
About anyone or anything
Tell me
What do I have to do?
To make you happy
What do I have to do?
To make you understand
What do I have to do?
To make you want me
But if I can't make you want me,
What do I have to do?"
'What do I have to do?'by Stabbing Westward

© Copyright 2000 Jamie Carlson - All Rights Reserved
Gene
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
1 posted 2000-03-11 02:58 PM


Wonderful poem. Good to see you, Jamie.

~Gene

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
2 posted 2000-03-11 03:11 PM


Welcome back Jamie ! Here grab a stool....what would you like to drink ?
Great poem you wrote there. One I can relate to very much. Thank you for posting it here.   Cheers !

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-03-11 04:08 PM


Wonderful poem, Jamie! Welcome back! You were missed!
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-03-11 08:23 PM


jamie-girl is back...outta site but never outta mind...
i just love an "angry and frustrated " chick poem...great job...lets all pull up a stool and cry in our beers...rootbeer for Spyro glad your posting again.
take care jm

ps LOVE the SW lyric signature...Im trying to stay out of the music store so as to not spend the grocery money(again)..LOL...but im thinking I gotta have that one...who needs the 5 basic food groups when you can have new TUNES...LOL...thanks again for the recomendation!!

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne



Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-03-12 12:54 PM


Welcome back! This is a good one! Kick him out! You deserve better.
Sasikat
Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290
St. Petersburg, FL
6 posted 2000-03-12 11:26 AM


Welcome back Jamie,

I'd say you're entitled to anger and frustration!  Really good poem.

Sheila

Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
7 posted 2000-03-12 05:55 PM


THIS WAS A GREAT POEM! I AM GLAD YOU GOT OUT YOUR FUSTRATION AND ANGER. THIS WAS VERY WELL EXPRESSED AND I AM GLAD YOU SHARED IT WITH ALL OF US. ALL OF US GIRLS CAN RELATE TO THIS ONE IM SURE, AND GUYS!  

AMY  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

just_another_fe
Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483
MICHIGAN
8 posted 2000-03-12 10:50 PM


this was a great poem it mae me think of my situation. i mostly like the last part
"Lessons are learned in the game of love
Through trial and regret
So that someday all of us will see
Our Soulmate when we've met"
keep up the goo work an welcome back. i hope this poem serve its purpose an you have been able to let go. i know from experience that letting go isnt easy   goo luck

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
9 posted 2004-12-25 09:40 AM


nicely done here...I can so relate!
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