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childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL

0 posted 2000-03-08 01:19 PM


She floats like an angel, light and free
as he holds her in his arms.
They twirl around the floor so easily,
he's enraptured with her charms.

He in his suit of gray,
she in her primrose dress,
their laughter fills the room,
touching all, a sweet caress.

His eyes shine like the stars as
he gves her a smile and wink.
She giggles uncontrollably
and her cheeks turn hues of pink.

To her he's so big and stong,
to him she's fragile and sweet.
To all they're a sight to behold as
she stands dancing on his feet.

You see, she's only three years old,
she's waited so long for this chance,
and this is the daddy she dearly loves
who spins her, in her first dance.

I never had a dad like this so I don't know what it truly feels like, but this is how I imagine it.


© Copyright 2000 Kim Soule - All Rights Reserved
just_another_fe
Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483
MICHIGAN
1 posted 2000-03-08 01:36 PM


WOW....This is a great poem i could picture it. I was kinda suprised when she was only 3 though lol. i'm sorry that you didn't have a dad like this. I think every little girl should have this moment. I don't remember mine but i'm sure it was there.
childomine
Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
2 posted 2000-03-08 01:48 PM


Thanks Fe - that was the idea - not to let on that it is a child and her dad.  The first I alluded to that was when I wrote of her dancing on "his" feet.  I guess it worked!!      

[This message has been edited by childomine (edited 03-08-2000).]

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-03-08 04:25 PM


beautiful images you shared here, very sweet...i wish i knew these memories as well,
take care child,(smile)jm

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
janet marie


Gene
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
4 posted 2000-03-08 05:19 PM


Very cute and delightful poem.  Funny, but I was just in the process of writing a poem along similar lines, but just the opposite. I often wonder how it would feel to have a child who was crazy about me.

~Gene

Little_Spyro
Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
5 posted 2000-03-08 07:23 PM


Like fe said, "WOW!" lol  
Yet another outstanding poem by you, child! You're starting to make me look bad... Maybe someday I'll be that daddy twirling my daughter around...hope I don't hit her with my tail...

Little Spyro T. Dragon

Sasikat
Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290
St. Petersburg, FL
6 posted 2000-03-08 08:59 PM


Childomine,

This is the sweetest poem I have ever read.  How I too wish I had these kind of memories of a father.

Sheila

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

7 posted 2000-03-08 10:26 PM


This is beautiful, Childomine! Simply beautiful! Yes, that is what it felt like! You have captured it perfectly!  

Denise

danni
Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688
wisconsin
8 posted 2000-03-09 12:54 PM


this was such a sweet sentiment. it is a shame that so many daughters have not felt the love of their father. i never received it from my biological father, but i was blessed with a wonderful step-father. whom i've always viewed as my real dad. wonderful work!
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
9 posted 2000-03-09 11:17 AM


Childomine  this was beautiful and  touching and omg you made me cry !!!  I always wanted my father to be like that as well, but I suppose he was too busy ...

 ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~


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