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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Haiku The Four Seasons Winter Cold winds from the north blow through leafless trees; a rebirth awaits. Spring Tiny pink blossoms falling from the cherry trees; fragrant memories. Summer Twilight’s last gleaming; the songs of the nightingale’s midsummer night’s dream. Fall Harvest moon, so big; brown fields lay bare of the earth, then begins their sleep. ----------- (All four seasons in one): Feeling very cold; covered in leaves, he keeps warm, as he dreams of spring. ______ ~Gene~ [This message has been edited by u_gene (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Excellent Gene. I'm not too good at Haiku myself and I respect your ability to not only write it but write it well. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow! This is beautifully and creatively written. You have a talent for haikus and senryus. Everyone must know that writing them and crafting them is not as easy as it looks. But, you make it look easy. Take care, Melissa Honeybee  |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I'm not so good at form writing. (Can you tell?)  But I loved your haikus, you can write them in a breeze. Joy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Gene these are SUPERB!!!!!! tandem Hakiu...who'd of thought lol great job!!I havent tried this yet...i cant be this brief..too long winded  take care, janet marie ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hahahhaha apparently I cant spell it either LOL ...HAIKU...thats better...  later gator jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Thanks Everyone, this is my first attempt at Haiku, so i really appreciate your nice comments. child, I bet you can do it. I didn't think I could either. Melissa, Thanks so much, and thanks for dropping in. When you get a chance, please share some of your haiku with us here in the Pub. Joy, Thanks, the whole idea is to try to write them in a flash of inspiration--a 'zen moment.' Janet marie, Thanks, Hakiu? Ooo, that means something totally different.  *just kidding*~Gene |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Gene, these are beautiful ! If you don't mind I will print these. They feel like little treasures, each and every one of them I know how hard it is to write haiku. I did not participate in the workshop at the time, but tried some "short" senryu anyway. I'd like to share them with you, although the meter is off in the second one, but hey.....I never said I am perfect Illusion Daydreamer’s secret solution ? Intuition The soul’s profound voice of free choice The heart yearns The mind wants to learn The soul knows Munda [This message has been edited by Munda (edited 03-08-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
These are wonderful, Gene! Denise |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
Excellent, u-gene. Let me try (tongue in cheek a bit?) I tripped over summer and slid down the autumn slope into the winter |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Munda, WOW! Thanks, I'm really pleased you liked them so much. Yours are great, I especially like the third one. Thanks Denise. Thanks Ted. Yours has nice imagery. ~Gene |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Well, now, gene! I think you've mastered the art of the haiku...while I'm still trying to get my rhyming words to make sense! Great job with all of these, I think I'll print them out too. Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
These are great u-gene! Haiku is something I have never been able to master and I admire anyone that has. Well done! Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night. -Edgar Allen Poe |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Gene, this is excellent and I AM ENVIOUS!! I have always wanted to try at Haiku but never felt I have the talent for it. I think Haiku is a beautiful and intricate talent and you have done very well here! Kim |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
First Haiku I ever really liked or understood for that matter. Thank you Gene |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Thanks, again to all of you!!! I'm so pleased that you find these haiku so interesting. I've got a lot more. But, I've been reluctant to post them because most people think it's childish to write what seems like short insignificant little nothings. Actually, in its simplicity, it's really quite complex and the child-like nature within it's complexity, is what makes such beautiful zen. Writing haiku has really helped my poetry. When I get a thought, I jot it down in a little haiku (kinda like an artist's 'table cloth' sketch), then when it feels right, I might make a longer poem out of it. For example, my poem, "Leaf Searcher" came about as a result of 4 or 5 different haiku. Haiku should be written at the moment of inspiration. For example, this morning, this is the first thing I noticed when I walked out my front door (something that made me stop and think for a moment)... Mountains in the mist, crow flies east to find the sun; spring will soon be here. ---- Haiku is traditionally written in three lines of 5-7-5 syllables (sometimes 3-5-3) and makes reference to the season in which it is set. Senryu is similar, except that it's more of a "life's lesson." For example, There is a thin line between our pain and pleasure; find it and be found. Tanka combines the rules of Haiku and Senryu, but is more imaginative with a lot of imagery and can be hundreds of lines long. ---- Those of you unfamiliar with Haiku, Senryu and Tanka, can find a great explanation at http://poetry.about.com/arts/poetry/gi/dynamic/offsite.htm?site=http://www.toyoma su.com/haiku Have fun with it. ~Gene p.s. Oh, one other quick point. You have to be careful though--or Senryu can sound like a fortune cookie. [This message has been edited by u_gene (edited 03-12-2000).] |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
There you go again Gene...amazing the stuffin out of me! Great work, I can't wait to see more!!!! Maybe one day, I'll be able to create Haiku with the ease you seem to have!  --Jamie |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Jamie, Thanks, I bet you can do it. I challenge you to try. Just follow my guidelines above. 3-5-3 Don't be shy; it's really easy if you try. --- It's supposed to be fun. don't feel intimidated. Go for it, no one will make fun; you'll have some. Gene |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
U_Gene~ Here I am .... thanks for the invitation. I like your Haiku Will post a few of mine too. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Gene, Your first attempt at Haiku makes it seem as if you've written it all your life. This is GREAT!! I haven't tried writing Haiku since I was in school many, many moons ago. You have inspired me to give it a try, even if it doesn't turn out well enough to post. Sheila ...the earth and myself are of one mind. The measure of the land and the measure of our bodies are the same........... Joseph, Nez Perce Chief |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
very well done I really liked all the seasons together that was great! ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Marge, Thanks for stoping by. Yours are great. Sheila, Thanks for the nice words. You can do it. Starr, Thanks. give it a try--you write so nice. ~Gene |
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