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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
The note I slipped beneath your door I camouflaged to look like the floor To write I used invisible ink For I was afraid that you would think The worse of me The curse of me. The words I feel are between the lines Your decoder ring will work just fine So put it on and you will see Just how much you mean to me The pain inside Will not subside If I don't hear then I will leave I feel as if I am bereaved For friendship is a precious thing Don't fly it on transparent wing So far away For e're a day |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Why do we hide who we are because we fear what others will think? I'm a firm believer in - take me as I am or take a hike. I did like this, however I'm not sure I read it as you meant it. |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Twin, This is truly good and I enjoyed it. Don't be afraid to let others know your true feelings because sometimes it becomes too late and we have lost out on the opportunity to express to those we care about. Sheila |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
Amazing how many of us poets have such a difficult time expressing our feelings...until we have a pen in our hand. Well done! |
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freckles Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 160Virginia USA |
I've tried and tried your note to heed, but the invisible ink I just can't read. The ring you speak of doesn't work for me; my tear-filled eyes impede its use you see. ---Very nicely written twinsgd; you have a flair for poetry. |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
This Poem is great. Somtimes things are better said with a veil. As long as you know it's there. Jon |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
For friendship is a precious thing Don't fly it on transparent wing Is the crux of the whole poem. In it I read a fear of rriendship lost should the "romantic" feelings be revealed. Perhaps I too am reading it other than intended, but I think works quite well to this interpretation. |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Twin, this has got to be the best of yours so far...of course, your others are all great too!  Beautiful job with this poem! I can see a lot of deeper meaning behind the words, and it's hard for me to write stuff like that. Again, great job! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very good! I enjoyed this!  Denise |
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busylisa_ca Junior Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 39 |
Glad to see you writing more and responding to a loved ones release. Nicely done, enjoying your poetry. busylisa |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
I must apologize for being so oblique, but the one for whom it was intended I know would understand. Childomine, Sheila, Jonas, Jon, Christopher,......so very rewarding to have thinking people's opinions on one's efforts, I thank you all. Freckles.....If I have a little flair Freckles it was born of dire necessity..thank you for the kind words. Little Spyro....you write beautifully Dragon...thank you for your praise. Denise, Busylisa......glad you both enjoyed......thankyou. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Oblique or not, I liked it a lot ! |
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