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childomine
Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL

0 posted 2000-03-01 08:31 AM


You follow me like a shadow
creeping relentlessly into my space,
taking more than your share
of who I am.

I beg you not to need me so much,
to leave a little of me for myself,
yet you continue to overtake me
stealing away my peace
and killing the essence of who I am.

Love doesn't extinguish the flame
that declares who a person shall be.
Love feeds that flame so that it
grows brighter and stronger and
gives in return.

You never feel full of my love.
Like a sponge you keep taking.
Like a cancer you strip me
of my body and my self-worth.

You have killed what there was
with your demanding, selfish needs.
Draining the well of my affection
but never filling it with the rains
of your own.

I must leave your killing love now
for if I do not
the spark of me that is left
will cease to be and, I fear,
never be found again.



[This message has been edited by childomine (edited 03-01-2000).]

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Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
1 posted 2000-03-01 09:44 AM


~child~

I applaud you!! You said it all, and you said it so well. Beautiful piece...and I am so glad that you are moving on. Apparently this person doesn't deserve you. Thanks for posting. Take care,

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Songbird
Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
2 posted 2000-03-01 09:59 AM


I don't think there is anything you have written that I don't like. Your voice shines like a candle in the night. Your voice rings clear and strong in this piece.
childomine
Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
3 posted 2000-03-01 02:01 PM


Thank you both for your comments.  I appreciate the support I've received and the talent I've witnessed since becoming a member here.  Again, thank you.  You honor me with your words of encouragement.

[This message has been edited by childomine (edited 03-01-2000).]

Little_Spyro
Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
4 posted 2000-03-01 04:17 PM


Oh, I don't know if that little spark could ever go out, or your love drained...from what I can tell you've got so much!   Beautiful poem, child, as always!  

Little Spyro T. Dragon

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

5 posted 2000-03-01 05:20 PM


Love doesn't extinguish the flame
that declares who a person shall be.
Love feeds that flame so that it
grows brighter and stronger and
gives in return."

child, this is an emotional show of your strength, and  very well written. I like this one MUCH!



 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be...
Jackson Browne
*I miss you baby...
I love you...always.


Sheilan
Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 50
Snohomish, WA
6 posted 2000-03-02 03:07 AM


Dear Child - Hauntingly beautiful.
Draining the well of my affections but never filling it with the rains of your own....There is still so much left in you that this person hasn't vamped ... I don't know if this is current or past, but if it is current....don't hold on.  If you are being hurt like that, LET GO!  Even w/o this person, you WONT be alone....PROMISE.
Sheilan

childomine
Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
7 posted 2000-03-02 06:44 AM


Sheilan-  unfortunately (or fortunately    ) this is something I'm going through now BUT - I see a light at the end of the tunnel and I'm not turning my eyes from it.  Thanks to all of you for reading and responding!!!
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

8 posted 2000-03-02 10:20 AM


Yep, I have been there too. It's a bad place to be or stay. Great poem!

Denise

Wikket
Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA
9 posted 2000-03-02 06:36 PM


Oh Childomine~~such a picture you paint with your words.  Beautiful and heartbreaking--you captured my attention, that's for sure.  Great Work!  We're all here for you and applaud you as a poet!  --Jamie    


 "I know I should have told you
But I was so afraid you'd leave
And now there's nothing left to say
Well nothing that you'd believe
I never meant to hurt you
With the things I couldn't say
I promise you tomorrow
While denying you today..."
by Stabbing Westward


twinsgd
Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416
Ontario,Canada
10 posted 2000-03-03 09:56 PM


A long long way from "The Glass Pony" Childomine . With your strength and courage and a little help from your friends ,you will prevail.
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