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Maya the Brokenhearted
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since 2000-02-13
Posts 66


0 posted 2000-02-27 09:29 AM


he was in love
with the idea of me
he fell headlong and heartfirst
into something he had never known
he risked his heart and soul
on a mere whim of love
he gave his life for a whisper
spoken softly at dusk
and he never ever looked back
or even turned his eyes
down to the path he trod
to watch for the pitfalls
of my love

he fell headlong and heartfirst
into the moor of loving me
stuck and foundering
like some poor wild pony
on the stormy marsh
and he never ever
tried to set himself free
and even then
there was not one ounce
of compassion left in my heart
to extend a hand to help him
loose the moor's bondage
instead, I let him sink
slowly
oh so slowly
into the dark mud
as I stood near the edge
fascinated and repelled
and unable
and even unwilling
to lend him my hand
and set him free



 Shall we live to breathe again? Or simply just exsist in this limbo we dare to call life!
~Maya 2/20/00

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childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
1 posted 2000-02-27 09:55 AM


I can see it all so vividly, feel it so deeply. So very sad. Your poem has great imagery and flow.
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-02-27 10:03 AM


Beautiful and sad.
Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-02-27 08:53 PM


Very sad poem, Maya. Wonderful writing!  

Denise

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-02-27 08:58 PM


very descriptive and emotional...I fell for someone the same way...i could relate to this..very well written and expressed

 She says baby,
It's 3am I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.
Matchbox20

I love you baby... always.*



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