»
Archives
»
The Corner Pub
»
Young Warrior
| The Corner Pub |
|
Young Warrior |
|
|
childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Behold the beauty, behold the grace. the lithe young body, the innocent face. His words are softly spoken, his eyes are easily read. He openly relays his emotions without a word ever being said. He stand there alone in a young warriors stance. looking harsh yet vunerable as he firmly grasps his lance. He dares you to make a move with a glint in his eye. You feel his emotions building up as he holds back his warriors cry. Oh young warrior with the hard, sad eyes young brave wishing to yell the war cries. Alas life has been so hard on you, to make you do the things you do. One can see the pride in the way that you stand, know how serious you are in the way you demand. So young to be a warrior so young to have dealt out pain; to have fought to the bitter end and to have felt deaths stain. You've only seen sixteen years - a man, yet but a child - soft spoken and loving - yet harsh and very wild - young warrior. |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Kim Soule - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WOW child, this is EXCELLENT...so well written with imagery of him...what was your inspiration for this. very nice work... take care, JM ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
||
|
Beverly Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 123New Mexico |
This poem is so fluid and has great descriptions! Keep posting! |
||
|
Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Yet another amazing post...sheze child you're making me look bad! I really like this--like Janet mentioned, the wonderful imagery, and Beverly how it flows...you sure know how to make a dragon feel inferior!  Keep it up!  Little Spyro T. Dragon |
||
|
William P Bussey Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 188 |
Your poem took me back to the James Fenmore Cooper books I read as a child, Well done. Bill |
||
|
Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Childomine, It doesn't matter what topic you pen your thoughts on, as each one of your works is a masterpiece. Sheila |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is excellent! Great imagery! Denise |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
