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Maya the Brokenhearted Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 66 |
he forgot to listen now silence is all he hears he forgot to listen his company is just his tears if he had listened and let her fly if he had listened instead of made her cry he forgot to listen and she slipped away he forgot to listen as she had her final say Shall we live to breathe again? Or simply just exsist in this limbo we dare to call life! ~Maya 2/20/00 |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great lesson in this, Maya! Listening is the better part of communication! Denise |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
I wish sometimes that I had listened to those who passed on...Great poem! Very thought-provoking!!!  "I know I should have told you But I was so afraid you'd leave And now there's nothing left to say Well nothing that you'd believe I never meant to hurt you With the things I couldn't say I promise you tomorrow While denying you today..." by Stabbing Westward |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Maya, I love this one...really reads well, and so much wisdom and emotion said in so few words...lovely work! take care, janet marie ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. your my inspiration, your my fire... your words fill me with poetic desire. Every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Talk about putting a lot into a little space! That's what you've done here, Maya--taken a big message and put it into a simple poem. How I wish I could do that!  Beautiful piece of work, Maya!  Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
A FRIEND SENT THIS TO MY E MAIL AND I LOVED IT SO I HAD TO COME COMMENT. I JUST LEFT THE LOVE OF LIFE BECAUSE EVEN THOUGH HE "LOVES" ME HE IS WITH ANOTHER GIRL AND I HOPE SO BAD THAT THIS IS HOW HE IS FEELING. I LOVE THE POEM ITS GREAT YOUR A GOOD WRITER KEEP IT UP *PUTS A BANDAID ON UR BROKENHEART* THERE NOW UR MAYA THE HEALING HEART LOL |
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Maya the Brokenhearted Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 66 |
Thanks so much guys for your wonderful replies. I wrote this on the spur of the moment, after I was feeling a bit upset with someone, and wanted him to see what he hadn't done. Dunno if it matters, or even did any good, but it's off my chest now! Thanks for the bandaid just_another I needed it greatly! Maya Shall we live to breathe again? Or simply just exsist in this limbo we dare to call life! ~Maya 2/20/00 |
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Another Heather Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 93Canada |
Like everyone else i agree that you succesfully fit a huge idea into a short poem. something that`s very difficult to do. This happens to strike a personal note with me as well, as i have been in a similar situation. "He forgot to listen now silence is all he hears" That was my favourite line. Great job Maya! "The world is never the same once a good poem has been added to it." -Dylan Thomas |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
very nice work, lots said in just a few lines... |
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Beverly Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 123New Mexico |
Maya, I simply love this poem! I agree with the others...so few words, but much is said! Thank you! Keep posting! |
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A very silly boy Junior Member
since 2000-02-23
Posts 16 |
Hi Maya. X Angel sent me to have a look at this poem. It's very powerful and very sad stuff. I can relate to this. You see, I did what the guy in this poem did  Unfortunately, life isn't a VCR and there's no rewind button, no way to edit out mistakes. You have my deepest sympathy and, for what it's worth, if this guy has a single ounce of compassion in his heart, he'll regret the pain he caused you for the rest of his life.A good poem and I hope you can move on and that your pain will ease soon. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
You say it very well with very few words. Well done |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Very well done. For some listening is a lost art and they end up being lost themselves. Left alone with their inability to really hear, understand or feel what is truly important - to the one (or ones)who love them. Heed what is important to others because someday you may wish it had been important to you. |
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