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Little_Spyro
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since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA

0 posted 2000-02-22 05:52 AM



The sun is setting once again,
Late yet early, now yet then;
The ending of day, a fiery sight,
Strong yet fading, made way for the night.

The darkness comes, it drags its own
Blackest veil over many a home,
Night so concealing, light so revealing
Coming from those not alone.

Violet closing on brilliant day,
Put out the flame shining over the bay,
And as the sand cools, slowly the tidepools
Turn from light beige to gray.

This is where my friend and I
Found ourselves, out under the sky
Watching and waiting, playful debating
As to what we're on Earth for and why.

Are we here to simply combine?
Here to make the planets allign?
We only can do what we see to be true
Deep in the heart and mind.

And as we rested on the sand
We heard the sounds of a playing band,
Quiet but strong, stacatto yet long,
Echoing over the land.

So then we went over there to observe
The people performing; they did deserve
A round of applause; yet unspoken laws
Kept us in silent reserve.

They sang a song, sorrowfully deep
A song that would put you to fitful sleep,
Restless and dreary, tired and weary,
Singing of obscure defeat.

They had fought, long and hard
In a battle; they showed the scars
Of trying to save some of us from the grave--

Then silence.


They looked up at the stars...


We now had an answer to our debate.

We are here to help each other,
We are here to love one another,
To save what we can, take care of the land
And treat everyone like a brother.

Long ago, a man was nailed to a cross
For spreading this knowledge.
What a loss...

It seems that some of those who have tried
To do something good are often denied
By those who grant only their own demand
And those that don't really understand.

________________________________________________________
I dedicate this to all those people who have truly tried to do something good and were stopped for some reason from doing it.

And to all of you here at Passions, you're doing something very, very good--showing each other kindness. Thanks for showing some to me.  


Little Spyro T. Dragon


© Copyright 2000 Sam Reinsford (Little_Spyro) - All Rights Reserved
Another Heather
Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 93
Canada
1 posted 2000-02-22 05:56 AM


Wow Spyro! I really enjoyed this one. Why we are on earth is topic my friends and I have discussed many a time and this is one of the best answers I`ve heard. I really loved the use of colours and the other details. I think that gave your poem a strong sense of placement. I really felt like I was there too!

 "The world is never the same
once a good poem
has been added to it."
-Dylan Thomas

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-02-22 09:36 AM


Your poems always touch me deeply, Sam. This one more than most. Well done!  

Denise

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-02-22 10:10 AM


SAM!!!!!!!!!!!!! WOW WOW WOW!!!!!!!!!

"Violet closing on brilliant day,
Put out the flame shining over the bay,
And as the sand cools, slowly the tidepools
Turn from light beige to gray."

this poem is AMAZING!!!!
now you've gone and done it...
this one gives me a bad case of POET ENVY!!
thats when I read someone elses words and WISH I had wrote it...(smile)
superb sammy!!!



 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.
your my inspiration, your my fire...
your words fill me with poetic desire.
Every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
Janet Marie
*I miss you baby...
I love you, always.*


JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
4 posted 2000-02-22 05:51 PM


Your descriptions at the begining were enough for me!  I almost wished after reading this I had such a friend to contemplate such things with while lying in the sand.     Just wishful thinking I supose!
Thanks for this poem Spyro.  

Joy

Little_Spyro
Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
5 posted 2000-02-23 06:13 AM


I'm also working on image manipulation and blending--I'm going to attempt to make a picture of me (the human me) hugging one of my dragons...lol  
I'll see what I can do with it, do you think I've got a chance?

Little Spyro T. Dragon

Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
6 posted 2000-02-23 07:06 PM


This poem will leave a peaceful smile on my face for the rest of the night. Great poem Sam !
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
7 posted 2000-02-23 07:45 PM


This is a wonderful poem! And I bet you can do the image manipulation, cause you can do everything!!!  

rich-pa
Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317
New Orleans, Louisiana
8 posted 2000-02-23 10:31 PM


first off i'm gonna have to say that i enjoyed th piece and that i realy love the internal rhyme scheme, i like the way it makes the poem flow.  now i know you did the line breaks and all to make the poem pause and to amphasize things but i still have a problem with it, a structured poem shoudl follow the structure through,  perhaps you should try some other literary tachniques to stress the important part such as alliteration, or sentence structure.  it's just a thought and i'm far from an expert.  overall though i really dug it.

rich-pa

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
9 posted 2000-10-14 02:17 AM


very awesome...

hugs, dg


she doesnt want the kind of love she can live with--she wants the kind she cant live without
-clint black

kcsgrandma
Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
10 posted 2000-10-14 09:42 AM


Beautiful and profound!  

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
11 posted 2000-10-14 12:34 PM



love this, my dragon friend.  
glad dg bumped it up.  
miss you  

love ya,
    -tricks




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes


midnightblues
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597
Singapore
12 posted 2009-10-14 10:39 PM


I came across this today, it uplifted my mood. I am once again reminded of the reason that I exist

Thanks!

Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

dgvarner
Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
13 posted 2011-12-13 02:00 PM


I haven't been in the blue in a while... but I've kept my "private library" intact--just going through it... revisting some fantastic writers such as you Little Spyro
I've told my daughter (Echo Bleu) to read you--she just arrived in the blue.  

Inspiring... enjoyed again the read.  
g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

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