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Another Heather Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 93Canada |
If I could throw you to the earth, The ground would break your fall, The sea would splash your face, The waves would drown your fears. Instead I lift you up to the heavens. The air sends you soaring, The clouds leave you floating, And you crash into the sky. What have I done? You`re now out of reach And it`s I who caused it. My world`s become a complete oblivion And it`s I who is at fault. I`ve hollowed you out, and filled you with fantasy And it`s I who must be blamed. For I am the Creator, the Almighty Mother Nature. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great imagery, Heather. Very lovely. I would just change 'And it's I who is at fault' to 'And it's I who am at fault' (I think! lol) Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
another excellent piece...very nice...strong imagery and emotions expressed here... good job! janet marie |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
"And you crash into the sky." Very nice, I like double entendre. ~Gene |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Great descriptions here. Liked the line... "I've hollowed you out, and filled you with fantasy" Joy |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Liked this a lot Heather. Great imagery ! |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
on first reading of thei spoem all i noticed was the excellent use of imagery, bu ton reading it i think that i may have rgasped it. it looks to me like it is mother nature addressing mankind. she coulda threw us dow but lifted us up and now we ruin her world...am i on target or is this just what i got from the poem? if i am on target i love it all the more and would also like to say that the trees say they're gonna take over in a coup de'tat |
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untold sorrow Junior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 12aiea, hawaii, united states |
well, i really enjoyed reading this poem. but forgive me for i have read something else into this poem. you ever built someone up so high and you let them know it? then they take full advantage of u... in essence you've created a monster... but its a great poem...  |
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Another Heather Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 93Canada |
rich-pa and untold sorrow: The story behind this one is close to untold sorrow`s interpretaion. basically it`s when you build someone up to be something they`re not and it then becomes sort of impossible to reach them. by that i mean they`re harder to talk to and be around because you`ve put them on such a pedestal. the bad thing about it is the person hasn`t changed but your perception of them has. I think it`s very interesting how rich-pa got a completely different idea, though. I`m glad cause I think that`s a sign of a good poem. When it can be perceieved in many different ways. Thanks for reading, guys! |
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