navwin » Archives » The Corner Pub » Please Love me Back!
The Corner Pub
Post A Reply Post New Topic Please Love me Back! Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Chico
Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67


0 posted 2000-02-10 09:20 PM


PLEASE LOVE ME BACK
  
Did you ever love someone;
  that never loved you back?
Ever had your best friend;
  stab you in the back?
Ever feel used and then discarded?
  And knew the person;
didn't care you were broken hearted.
  Ever had tears well up in you eyes;
when remembering her, "I love you" ?
  An how you found out it was all lies;
when she kissed your friend;
  right in front of you?
Did you ever love somone that didn't love you?
  Did you ever feel like crying when the lied?
telling you they were being true.
  Ever remember trying to ask her;
"what happend to those moments we shared";
  and when resting on my shoulder;
you told me you cared.
  And when lying in that open field;
underneath a dark blue sky;
  you told me you heart was seald;
And if you ever lost me you would cry.
  I thought that moment forever I'd cherish;
until the day I die.
  Just to have it all perish;
in the twinkling of an eye.
  And then that time you kissed him;
I thought my heart would break;
  for that was my kiss;
and not his to take.
  And when you told  him our little joke;
that no one else knew about.
  I felt like a complete fool;
at how you'd played me out.
  But then when you called him charming;
I could hardly believe my ears;
  cause that is what you had called me;
throughout all our years.

And so I watched you thrown;
  into the arms of that other guy.
Leaving me all alone;
  forever to wonder why.
Did you ever love someone that didn't love you?
  Did you ever feel like crying when they lied;
telling oyu they were being true.
  And when you cried;
did you feel like crawling under a rock?
  not caring if you died.
have you ever felt there's nothing else you can do;
  to keep this person by your side.
Did you ever wonder why she did'nt love you;
  and never told you, "I Care".
did you ever ask yourself, "what did I do wrong"?
  and why am I so lonely, when she isn't there?
I always made sure;
  she had everything in life
I always made sure;
  I bore all the sacrifice.
I always let her do what she wanted to,
  and trading my hopes and dreams;
trying to make hers come true.
  I tried my hardest to pay every cost.
But I finally came to realize;
  There was nothing I could do, for she was lost.

And now looking at my life, seeing how its been.
  Always hearing broken promises.
Not knowing where to begin.
  I have cried and hurt;
and felt my heart skip a beat;
  And not knowing if my fragile heart;
could take all the heat.
  I had waited and waited;
for you to come along.
  so you could come and fill;
my heart with a song
  And when you finally came;
I thought my life was complete;
  as you filled my heart with joy.
only to realize, I couldn't compete;
  With your other little play toy.

So now I stand here, so empty and lost;
  wanting no one to enter my heart.
Fearing that as the other girl;
  They will strike me with a dart.
So if I seem to you mean and cruel;
  I beg you you to realize;
that I am in a duel.
  Not knowing if I'm right or wrong
or if i'm stupid or smart.
I'm just fighting my best;
just trying to protect my heart.



© Copyright 2000 Chico - All Rights Reserved
Little_Spyro
Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
1 posted 2000-02-10 11:48 PM


*sniff*...wow, what an experience...
This really hits home, Chico, beautiful piece. If you don't mind me asking, what made you write this?


Great poem, really great poem.

Little Spyro T. Dragon

just_another_fe
Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483
MICHIGAN
2 posted 2000-02-11 12:22 PM


THIS IS A GREAT POEM. A LITTLE HINT GO BACK THROUGH AND EDIT THERE ARE A FEW TYPOS   VERY GOOD POEM THOUGH
Gene
Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
3 posted 2000-02-11 02:27 PM


Welcome to the Pub, Chico.  Nice poem.

In answer to, "Did you ever..." --Yes, to all--Been there too.

~Gene

Chico
Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67

4 posted 2000-02-11 04:12 PM



   Well little Spyro, to be honest with you, this is not a poem that I wrote because It was somthing I was going through. But because one of my best friends was going through it, so I wrote it actually for them. I do that alot though, write poems for other people, but then again I have some of my own.
And gene, I hope everything works out for you (if your still going through it) cause even thought I don't know how it feels first hand, I am almost there. well take care, and thanks for the comments, I love getting them, So I can see what other people think about my poems...
                          CHICO


[This message has been edited by Chico (edited 02-11-2000).]

Chico
Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67

5 posted 2000-02-11 04:15 PM


Well little Spyro, to be honest with you, this is not a poem that I wrote because It was somthing I was going through. But because one of my best friends was going through it, so I wrote it actually for them. I do that alot though, write poems for other people, but then again I have some of my own.
And gene, i hope everything works out for you (if your still going through it) cause even thought I don't know how it feels first hand, I am almost there. well take care, and thatnks for the comments, I love getting them, So I can see what other people think about them...

                          CHICO

Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
6 posted 2000-02-11 05:27 PM


A very emotional poem Chico. Welcome to the Pub  
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

7 posted 2000-02-13 07:11 PM


Welcome to Passions, Chico!! Sorry for the delay in the welcome (computer problems). I think it is a special gift to be able to write what you haven't personally experienced!  

Denise

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
8 posted 2000-05-10 03:49 AM


I've walked that road before.  It hurts and leaves a bitter trail of salty tears. But you do find some inner strength and carry yourself away from the experience to love again.  I wish your friend luck.    Good poem, btw.

 I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

blackhalo
Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
9 posted 2000-05-11 01:55 PM


Beautiful and sad.  Welcome to the Pub!

 Life defines no more than what it is you ask for.
April 20, 2000
Alicia A. Renzelman

a_little_girl
Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA
10 posted 2000-05-11 06:40 PM


Chico,
A beautifully tragic poem. I really hope to see more of this great work in the future. Welcome!

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » The Corner Pub » Please Love me Back!

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary