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Exile Junior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 42 |
I've just found this place, and looking through here am a little intimidated...my stuff isn't nearly this good. Little Spyro and Joy communicate emotions so well. But I will put one up here to see what the rest of you think: TO BE A MAN From my earliest day, I've found my own way And relied on myself for my needs. Girls and infants can cry, But my eyes MUST stay dry; It's in silence, alone, a man bleeds. Work and worry, Hurt and hurry, These are the days of a man. Defend those who Depend on you, Because you know that you can. To pursue what I lack, I once turned my back On the helpless ones in my care. But when I had learned, I finally returned And found I had much to repair. When a man tries to feed What he thinks he might need And neglects the tasks set in place, He will find himself hollow, With no clear road to follow, And ending up flat on his face. So, men, keep to your road, And shoulder your load. This is what I hope to teach. Think of THEM, and stand tall! I will say this to all, But my sons are the ones this must reach. |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Yeah, all true...very true--even though I'm only 14, about 99% of that stuff applies already!  Great poem, Exile, and welcome to Passions! Oh and another thing--expect a reply to all your poems from dsnyder (Denise)! "Weird?! No, 'weird' is when you apply your human rules to where they shouldn't be applied. That's why it seems strange to you." --Ttark |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Exile! This is an extraordinary piece of writing! With a timeless, priceless message that will be invaluable to sons (and daughters, too) I enjoyed this very much! (if you would like to send me your email I have a special welcome for you from Passions!) p.s. Hi Sam |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful! Welcome to the family! I look forward to reading more from you.  |
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Exile Junior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 42 |
Thank you all very much indeed for your kind comments. I wish they were better deserved. It's more doggerel than poetry really; more Robert Service than Robert Frost. But if you're interested, perhaps I'll try another. Again, your kindness and your welcome are most appreciated. - Exile |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Such an emotional poem. I read it over and over again and hope it will reach the ones you truly wrote it for. A great translation of feelings. Thanks for sharing. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Check you email, Exile, for your special welcome! Denise |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
What, Exile gets a special welcome and I didn't?! lol I'm just kidding, my welcome was very special indeed! A note to everyone else: Keep on replying to this for a while, it deserves to be at the top for a while. Little Spyro T. Dragon "Weird?! No, 'weird' is when you apply your human rules to where they shouldn't be applied. That's why it seems strange to you." --Ttark |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Welcome, welcome, welcome. And keep posting Exile!!!!!! Joy "To you, my children, These lovely flowers I give. Prune ye my vines and fig trees, With care my flowerets tend, But keep the pathway open, Your home is at the end." -Robert Frost (from: God's Garden) |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Sad but true & very well said. |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
Exile....Welcome to Passions! This was a beautiful poem. Hope to read many more! |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Very nice, Exile. You have nothing to be intimidated about. I'm new too and think this forum might be a little less hectic than Open#5. ---- Gene |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
*bows* My hat's off to you.. This was wonderful... MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU, MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN, MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND Irish Blessing |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Welcome! You write wonderfully and I look forward to reading more! ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Exile!! Wonderful poem!! It's got so much rhythm i love reading it!! Keep writing please!!!!!! We look forward to more from you!! swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
Excellent poem Exile.....look forward to reading more Jack |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
i absolutely dug thsi one, it has an excellent message, and trust me, you do a great job of conveying emotion. |
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