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JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2000-01-23 11:27 AM


Why must I hesitate
Every time I must communicate
With you?

My words travel out from my lips
They stop when they reach your mind's finger tips
Where they gently push them away

The message that I want to get across
Seems to disapeer and then it's forever lost
When you don't even listen

It makes me flaming mad, my ongoing plees
When I can't even make you see
That I just want you to understand

So fine, don't listen, don't understand
But there is just one thing and that's MY plan
To go without looking back
To find out if I will later lack
To make my own choices, to find out what lays ahead
'Cause I better make use of my time before I'm dead.



 JOY


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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-01-23 01:11 PM


Without communication there really can't be a relationship......great message in this Joy!  

Denise

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-01-23 02:45 PM


This sounds like my marriage...my EX marriage! Good one Joy!
Little_Spyro
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since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
3 posted 2000-01-23 02:57 PM


Well, I'm not married yet, and probably won't be for...oh, another eight or ten years, maybe more, so I wouldn't know much about that.
But I do know that this is a great poem!  



 "Weird?! No, 'weird' is when you apply your human rules to where they shouldn't be applied. That's why it seems strange to you." --Ttark


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-01-23 04:48 PM


I really love this poem, I relate to its message. I like the way you express the frustration we feel when we are not understood or appreciated and the way you take the poem to its end...to the realization of needing to move on...deserving something better.
Janet Marie

Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
5 posted 2000-04-14 03:40 AM


I REALLY can relate to this and I think you did a wonderful job in expressioning our frustrations when we aren't understood. ..

 MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU,
MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK
MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE
THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS
AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN,
MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND

Irish Blessing

childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
6 posted 2000-04-14 04:17 AM


This is very good Joy.  Being with someone who doesn't listen or try to understand leaves one feeling very much alone.  Life is definitely too short to "settle".

 ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is....
Black Eagle
Oglala Sioux holy man


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