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Bright Melody
Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 37
O'Fallon Illinois

0 posted 2000-01-22 03:01 PM



Close to the door
He paused to stand
as he took his class ring
off her hand
all who were watching
did not speak
as a silent tear
ran down his cheek
and through his mind
the memories ran
of the moments they walked
and laughed in the sand
but now her eyes were so terribly cold
for he would never again
have her to hold
they watched in silence
as he bent near
and whispered the words......
"I LOVE YOU" in her ear
he touched her face and started to cry
as he put on his ring and wanted to die
and just then the wind began to blow
as they lowered her casket
into the snow....
this is what happens
to man alive......
.....when friends let friends.....
drink and drive.


 If you love something let it go... if it comes back it's yours... if it doesn't it never was.

© Copyright 2000 Bright Melody - All Rights Reserved
Little_Spyro
Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
1 posted 2000-01-22 03:21 PM


Wow...talk about a poem with a message!
Great piece...and great message as well.

Little Spyro T. Dragon


 "Weird?! No, 'weird' is when you apply your human rules to where they shouldn't be applied. That's why it seems strange to you." --Ttark


Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-01-22 03:47 PM


This is excellent! Great poem with an important message! Well done! And welcome to the Corner Pub!

Denise

Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
3 posted 2000-01-22 06:33 PM


A wonderful poem. I could "feel" the emotions here. Sad, so sad.
JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
4 posted 2000-01-23 12:55 PM


Very powerful!  

 Joy

"To you, my children, These lovely flowers I give.
Prune ye my vines and fig trees,
With care my flowerets tend,
But keep the pathway open,
Your home is at the end."

-Robert Frost
(from: God's Garden)


Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
5 posted 2000-04-14 03:42 AM


*tears stream down my face*  Wow.. I wasn't expecting the way this ended.. Very touching..  Thankyou for getting the message out in your wonderful poem...

 MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU,
MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK
MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE
THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS
AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN,
MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND

Irish Blessing

childomine
Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
6 posted 2000-04-14 04:11 AM


Wow Melody!  What a poignant poem!!  So very sad and carrying such a powerful message.  Excellent.

 ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is....
Black Eagle
Oglala Sioux holy man


ESP
Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
7 posted 2000-04-14 05:38 AM


This is a beautiful and tragic poem. The message you express is taken to heart by me for sure.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie



 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
8 posted 2000-04-17 04:07 PM


Wow,this is REALLY great!! It has a great,simple rhythm,not to mention the message!! Way to go Melody!! I'm looking forward to reading more!!

swampfaeryie


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

PrincessPoet
Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133
Long Beach, Calif.
9 posted 2000-04-19 04:28 PM



Bright Melody, Hi!

This is Great, Such Impact
surprising ending, So sad
You should really run with
this one
Is it Published?
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 Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up.
          -Yoruba Proverb

Poetry & Friendship,
  PrincessPoet



[This message has been edited by PrincessPoet (edited 04-19-2000).]

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