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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Fragile souls like crystal snowflakes Desirous for some one to dare Forgiveness to give for mistakes Reaching out for the solitaire Desirous for some one to dare Breaking down these solid brick walls Reaching out for the solitaire One who isn’t afraid to fall Breaking down these solid brick walls Kindred spirit in honesty One who isn’t afraid to fall Playing my true life’s symphony Kindred spirit in honesty Release from an inner darnkness Playing my true life’s symphony Pure melody of sweet caress Release from an inner darkness Shards of my shattered long lost dreams Pure melody of sweet caress Silences from within the screams Shards of my shattered long lost dreams Forgiveness given for mistakes Silences from within the screams Fragile souls like crystal snowflakes Munda  |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Beautiful, Munda!  I like how you arranged it, with one line from the previous stanza becoming the first line in the next...wish I had thought of that! Good work! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Well thank you Sam. Why don't you visit the Poetry Workshop some day. That's where I learned how to write a pantoum and there's lots and lots more out there. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very beautiful Munda.... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I LOVE to see these wunnerful pantoums & stuff outside of the workshop.... Awesome, simply awesome!!! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ya did good! Excellent pantoum! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thank you for reading and your kind replies. It's so much fun a pantoum ! I must do again soon. |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
You see your little dancing smilie guy--can you hear what he's saying? This, "Woohoo! Very nice. I really think it's a good literary device, to end with the way it started. I like it a lot. ~Gene |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Heavy! Wow! Reading this pantoum makes me want to step back and think about how much I take my life for granted. Inspiring! Bravo! --Jamie  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Munda this poem is AMAZING...I love it..and these kind of poems are hard to write and require a lot of thought...but you made it look SO easy...you should be extra proud of this one...  thanks for mentioning the poetry workshop, I'll have to check it out...there is so much to see and do here...I'm still finding my way around all the forums.Take care, Janet Marie Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding- remain the most beautiful words ever heard. Janet Marie |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Gene - Woohoo to you too I just read a multiple poem from you in open ! Amazing Wikket - Thank you  Janet Marie - Thank you And you know what ? This isn't too difficult to write. Once you know the first four lines, it almost writes itself. Please do join us in the Workshop |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
dear Munda, you are too modest having tried this myself,i think the pantoum is a real toughie!(Groan) Impressed by this brilliant work of yours.....will have to take some time before i try this again |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
Beautifully written and arranged. This style is very effective and what a lovely way to describe the fragile soul. |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Munda, This is so beautiful and melodic, it sings a sad/sweet song of a tender soul reaching out for acceptance with a foreknowledge of bitter rejection. This soul reaches still, with hope. What a touching , honest expression of raw emotions, the need to connect, despite the risk. This is so well written, MUNDA, YOU RULE!!! Dennis :^) |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
i'm enjoying reading your poetry!..this pantoum style is very interesting--i didnt realize it had a name! keep sharing--i'll keep enjoying "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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