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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
**This is actually supposed to be a 'shape-poem', but you know perfectly well that internet just isn't smart enough for that. It's in the shape of a woman's torso in profile, if you can imagine and get some of the effect.** -wen ==================================================== He Thinks "She's sitting at the same dressing table that was her eighteenth birthday present, her various bottles and boxes spread out before her in a methodical fashion. She leans forward, scrutinizing herself in the mirror. As she leans, her slip draws tight to her body, hinting at her still-youthful curve. Her green eyes glance at my mirror image in her background before she takes the first liquid from a bottle and glides it onto her cheek. . . She has a long, sensual neck, and her wet hair has made spots on her shoulders." He looks down at his clasped hands, arms resting on his knees. "I've been married to her for seven years, and I don't think I've ever watched her at her dressing table as I'm watching her now. I want to memorize every move she makes. I don't want to lose another second. Last night, as I told her of my first mistake in seven years, I could see her fall to pieces right before my eyes. I said all the usual things, 'She meant nothing to me, you're the only one I want to be with, I love you. . . ' And she didn't scream, she didn't cry, she didn't say a word. I wish she had. I wish she had hit me, cried aloud against the sin I'd committed against her, shown some type of emotion so I would know what she felt. But she didn't. She was so quiet, so still. She reminded me of a deer that has just recognized the scent of the hunter in her forest. She slipped silently into the bedroom and closed the door. I stayed up the rest of the night crouched at her door, my ear to it, listening. I heard no crying, no anger. I heard nothing. And that hurt me most of all. I wonder if she knows that was the worst thing she could have done to me. . . shut me out like that. She's never shut me out before. That's one of the reasons I fell in love with her. . . because she was always so open with me, so inviting, so there. . . I remember having a conversation with someone once about whether it was possible to have something and not have it at the same time. I remember having scoffed at the impossibility. 'You can't have A and Not A at the same time. . .' You can. I know this now. Because I have my wife, but at the same time she's not my wife anymore. And I don't know what I can do to bring her back. I can't erase the past, but I can't go on living in it. The only thing I can think of is to love her. If she decides I've hurt her beyond bearing, if she runs. . . God, I can't even think about that. I just wonder what's behind those green eyes of hers. I wonder what she's thinking. I know I don't deserve to know anymore, but at the same time, I want to know, I need to know. It's too hard being suspended in limbo like this. . . waiting for just a word from her. . . waiting. |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
hey, it almost worked. (trust me - it looks a lot better normally than it does now.) ;-) -wen |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wendy, This is captivating. How about a novel? You and Denise both have the makings. Liz |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
If I had the patience for novels, I'd sure try. ;-) Most of my poems have a prose-type feel simply because I DON'T have the patience.  -wen |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Captivating poem, Wendy. You certainly are very talented! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
If it was your intent for the reader to feel sorry for bothe poeple....you achieved it...well done. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I wish you had the patience Wendy!  I'd love to read a novel that you wrote! This poem was rather prose like but I definetly liked it! JOY |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
The majority of the 'poetry' I write is like prose... a friend of mine calls them "prose-poems," and even cited some famous author that did them too, but I've noticed people have a hard time with them because they're not (sounding trumpets...) POETRY. Still, it's all I'm really good at. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I really enjoy your style of writing here Wendy Great piece!! This is the first of yours that I've read and now I'll be looking for more ....Do you write in the Prose forum also?A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
come on already..your breakin' my heart...how does it end..? |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Do I post in the prose forum? Not yet. I do write prose, but I haven't actually gone to the prose forum yet. I may do that soon, just for you *wink*. -wen |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
Oh...I see how your gonna be..(wink)..just ignore poor old Majestic...Just leave him wondering....And here I thought you were a nice person...hum..have to rethink the whole thing now....lol....come on allready...tell.. |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Beautiful po--er, PROSE, Wendy! Please teach me how to make words into shapes like that sometime...lol I hope you don't mind that I mentioned you in my poem...(Please reply to this if...etc) And will someone PLEASE tell me how to make those little yellow smiley faces so I can make them too? =) ^ ^ ^ This is the best I can do for now... "Weird?! No, 'weird' is when you apply your human rules to where they shouldn't be applied. That's why it seems strange to you." --Ttark |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Fine, Maj, I will answer you - I don't know. This was all the vision showed to me. But, just for you all, I will post another one like this. I may have posted it in another forum, but if I did it didn't generate enough response to count. I'm glad to have found you guys... it makes me not feel so odd for my strange style. -wen |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
I hope as I make my way through the written halls of this place, I find the ending to such a sad and terrible thing. I know in life its hard to do, forgiving someone who you've gave your life to. Someone who took such a bite from your heart, when they made one mistake and tore your world apart..Beautifully written and I do hope to see your name more.. MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU, MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN, MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND Irish Blessing |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is great, so how does it end?!? If you ever write a book, I'm sure it would be a best seller! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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