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Stephanos
since 2000-07-31
Posts 3618Statesboro, GA, USA 
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Counterfeit Excitement Counterfeit excitement is the bait and hook of sin, the thing which wraps itself around whatever ruins men, and causes what is vile and base to look refined and well. But draped with heavenlies, the Devil’s house is still a hell. Yet vice parades quite loudly all its promises of joy and flaunts with puffed pretensions every tinseled little toy that makes the rote life better, more adventuresome and wild. At least you thought they would, but look, their usage has defiled and cast a dreary sheen upon the matrix of your life! Promised fun and pleasure, you were given pain and strife. But there’s a better path to seek a thrill that doesn’t fade, a joy in Christ that lasts where better choices have been made. Though counterfeit excitement is the easy way to feel, It always leaves us bored and sick and dying for the real. That's why the joy of righteousness is such a better deal!  Stephen. 5/22/01 [This message has been edited by Stephanos (edited 05-24-2001).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Good answer to the challenge. Great job. Joyce |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This is wonderful Stephanos, I must share this with my pastor and others. Well done!! |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
With your permission, I'd love to share this with some of my grandchildren. It definitely tells it like it really is in a great way. Thank you. Rae |
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Stephanos
since 2000-07-31
Posts 3618Statesboro, GA, USA |
You are certainly welcome to share this. your friend, Stephen. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Stephen: An outstanding job! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Stephanos, WOW, this follows perfect suit with your last Spiritual's post. Great job on meeting the challenge as well. Glad to know that our God never breaks His promise... all that we ever get from God is the "Real Deal." Nice write. Bob <>< |
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Stephanos
since 2000-07-31
Posts 3618Statesboro, GA, USA |
Hey guys, I need a suggestion here. I changed a couple of lines slightly. But there is one which I cannot decide if I should change or not. My question is which way do you all think is the best... Here is the line... At least you thought they would, but look, their usage has defiled and cast a dreary sheen upon the matrix of your life! here is the alternative... At least you thought they would, but look, their usage has defiled and cast a dreary shadow on the matrix of your life And here are my thoughts. The second makes more sense because "sheen" in the first reading, actually means "something shiney, bright, or glistening". So a "dreary sheen" is an oxymoron. But the first one sounds better to my ear. I don't really know why... can't quite put my finger on it. And the "paradox" that exists with "dreary" and "sheen" could be seen as a cool thing (as long as people feel like it was intended and not a blunder... a kind of enigmatic bardesque saying). Also, the two thoughts could actually work together as an analogy of sin. Sin has a certain "shine" or "glow", and yet it is dismal and wretched. Both would be acceptable, but which is the best? Be honest. The whole paradox thing might be stretching it...for being enigmatic is one thing, while being gaudy (and obtrusive) is another. But I just don't know. I value your opinions. Let me know. Stephen. Thanks |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Dear Stephanos, I can see why you thought of changing from sheen to shadow although as you explained an argument can be put up for the use of sheen. However, I like the way it reads with shadow substituted and dreary shadow is much more realistic then dreary sheen without going into some complicated reasoning. Either will work,, I just happen to like the word shadow better in this sentence. Joyce |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I think this is perfect! I'd leave it just the way it is! This is some excellent writing Stephen!!  |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
I loved it!You told it like it really is!Great rhyme and flow!Nice job! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Amen!! Wonderful message, Stephanos. You have said a mouthful. All writing comes |
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