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Master
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0 posted 2001-04-10 04:12 PM


The winds were wailing and whining.
All eyes were looking to the west.
The peak of Calvary was shinning
To guide the fated and the blessed.
The sand was blowing in my face,
And slightly squinting fearful eyes,
Among the mob, I caught your gaze
And found You hard to recognize.
The pain You suffered for our sins,-
I felt your torment like a mother!
And your appearance made me wince,
And your assurance made me shudder.
I rushed to wipe your sweat and blood,--
Moved by mere pity and compassion.
And through the dust, the dirt, the mud,
I recognized Your love, Your passion!
And when I grasped the cloth again
To wipe my tears, I saw emerging
Your handsome outline on my hand,
And understood, I was a virgin.

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 04-10-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
sandgrain
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1 posted 2001-04-10 06:57 PM


Your imagery made me feel I was right there.  This is a touching, timely piece,  so well written.
     Rae  

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2 posted 2001-04-10 10:23 PM


Were we there?  We bear the sins of thos that were and crucified Him.  But he has already forgiven us.  Good poetry. Joyce
Lighthousebob
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3 posted 2001-04-14 01:56 AM


Master,

You have done well with your portrayal of a woman at the crucifixion... and I liked the supernatural affect at the end.... the image of Christ on her hand.... Perhaps she shared in a mother's agony?   You certainly can tell a good story.  Happy Easter.   Bob <><

ellie LeJeune
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4 posted 2001-04-14 06:57 AM


I love this wonderful poem...May His image be imprinted on our hearts as well! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

BloomingRose
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5 posted 2001-04-14 11:06 AM


Well written with good imagery. I especially like the ending.
I read this twice; it's a good story.
Have a blessed Easter,
Deb

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6 posted 2001-04-14 05:55 PM


excellent. . .

a wonderful portrayal of Veronica. . . she will always be remembered. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

WhtDove
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7 posted 2001-04-18 09:43 AM


Forgive me I'm late.

This was spell binding, kept me going.  
Wonderful use of imagery, and you put the reader right into it.

Excellent job!!

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8 posted 2001-04-19 11:01 AM


I LOVE the imagery here.  Very beautiful poem.. a pleasure to read.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Master
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9 posted 2001-04-20 11:47 PM


Thank you all, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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