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walker
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since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240
Florida

0 posted 2001-02-18 09:33 AM


You hold, your child,
in you arms, he feels
protected.Your stroke his
hair, kiss him in the forehead.
Just like when he was a child.
Now he clings to life. The one
he knows, he has to give
away. You hold your child,
as he dies, without any victory,
in silence with great dignity.
You hear echoes:his flesh,our
bread, his blood,our wine.
You surrender him to the father
with the promise of his return.
As our only true hero, Jesus. You hold
your child, you stroke his hair,
you kiss him in the forehead.
Just like when he was a child.


A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

© Copyright 2001 walker - All Rights Reserved
ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
1 posted 2001-02-18 11:13 AM


I am so touched by this beautiful poem. I have a great love for Mary, she is to me the perfect mother we all need. Wonderful poem!

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
2 posted 2001-02-18 11:28 AM


Welcome Walker!

Only one critique for you. Check your spelling in the beginning there.

This is deeply touching! It's left open without mention of names which lets it be widely interpreted. Anyone in that position can relate, as well as those who haven't.

Deeply touching!


<*\\\><

I know not what the future holds,
but I know Who holds the future.

I don't question YOUR existance - GOD


Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725
California
3 posted 2001-02-19 02:44 PM


walker,

a sentimental portrayal of Mary;
I can almost hear her saying...
"I love you forever, I'll love you for always
as long as your living
my baby you'll be..."

and, at the end of the story,
the Son will be holding his own mother,
expressing the very same words to her.

Bob <><

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