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Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
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Texas

0 posted 2000-08-22 07:35 AM



Remembering the first steps that he took
Like a fish on a line, he had me hooked.
Growing older and standing alone
before I knew it, he was leaving home.

This is where my rhyme begins
when his world began to spin.
Each spin rotating out of control
splicing my heart and voiding my soul.

Helpless was I, to stop the rotations
My love was mixed with our frustration
Distressed and weak from consumption
so full of  fear and stagnation

Forsaken and shattered, a emotional hell
My life but a shadow of self
Comsumed by helplessness for my son
Others, I placed on a shelf.

Then in the clutter of a cold, black night
My life revolving around hell
I cried out to God in complete surrounder
A light beam appeared from my window

Within a moment time stood still
Jesus, came to me
Sweet tears that taste of morning dew
streamed gently down my cheek
as I gazed  upon His face
Precious tears He cried  for me
....so unworthy such as I....
He said give Me your burdens now
Rest in Peace
again
My child


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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
1 posted 2000-08-22 08:01 AM


Oh Marcy what a beautiful poem, isn't it just amazing how He takes the burdens and lifts us up.  So often I wonder why I waited so long to finally go to Him, never do get an answer, but I know it was the best thing to ever happen.  Thanks for sharing this.  Bonnie
ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
2 posted 2000-08-22 08:17 AM


dearest Marcy; My heart goes out to you, as I know this mother's pain. This beautiful poem says it all. I don't know what I would do without my Lord Jesus always with me, as I give Him every burden, He always works things out for good. My prayers are with you.
love, ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-08-22 03:22 PM


This is written so well, it's full of emotions that are strongly expressed.  It's a great piece, thank you for the chance to read it.
Janie
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since 2000-08-13
Posts 158

4 posted 2000-08-22 04:43 PM


How true that life is too hard to handle on our own! I can especially appreciate your anguish because I have a 19 yr old brother who is a constant reason for prayer. I have a poem I wrote for him called "The Prodigal Son" (I'll post it another time since I have some current topics) It's basically a story of his life with the exception of the end where I was trying to create a self-fulfilling prophecy for him by writing:

"Then, one day, God made it be; for him to wake, to finally see;
The demons cast from his soul's reach, only God's promise left to teach.
He learned with God, he's not alone; no matter where, he's always home;
With this, he learned to overcome; the demon's work was all undone.
With open heart, received God's word, truth was known, God’s voice, he heard,
Then, in spirit, he was born again and stepped from darkness to become a man."
I've given the poem to him, he cried when he read it, but I don't think he really understands where he is right now.

Thanks for sharing your heart.

Janie



Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
5 posted 2000-08-22 05:21 PM


Marcy, this fills my heart...I cannot say any more...

Hugs,

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
6 posted 2000-08-23 02:00 PM


Dear Marcy,
This is a very touching and revealing poem of the heart you have shared with us, Our hearts go out to you for the hurt-- but smiles at the faith which makes you strong and renewed.  God bless you through all your trials,
              David

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
7 posted 2000-08-24 07:36 AM


Thanks everyone for your kindness, prayers and taking the time to post.

Janie, this is a lovely poem, so uplifting.
I wish you would post it here in the forum so everyone could enjoy it. I will remember your brother in my prayers also. Thank you for adding to this poem with your input.

Love to all, Marcy

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
8 posted 2000-08-25 10:38 AM


Marcy this not only tares at any mothers heart, but touches it deep as well.

I hope things are looking up for all of you.
You are in my prayers!

Please check your email.

<*\\\><

Be an organ donor...give your heart to Jesus!

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
9 posted 2000-08-26 12:04 PM


I'm sorry I have to use this as a forum to post, but WhtDove, I have lost my email!!! I'm sure I WILL find my postoffice, but just know, if I should have responded back to you, why I haven't. k?  Love, Marcy

Thank you all again for the nice reception and kindness/with prayers, shown. Love, Marcy

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
10 posted 2000-08-26 12:18 PM


Marcy I was just letting you know I had found an error, and was wondering if you'd like me to correct it?

5th stanza, 3rd line "I cried out to God in complete surrounder."

I think you meant Surrender?  Let me know.

BloomingRose
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092
Florida
11 posted 2000-08-28 08:05 PM


No greater pain than the loss of a child
This really tore at my heart.
If we did not have our heavenly father to turn to, where could we go?

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