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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
can I find you in the sand would you steal my breath would you be my man will an angel with thick wings push me to you just to hear you sing songs that have drowned in layers of time you and warm white walls we don't need to rhyme words just fall between me and you like angels fallen to the dew of a new day in new air my feet penetrate the sand still alone will you be there? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Look into your heart, Jennie, and you will find Him there... very nice! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
jenny; listen to Sunshine...she's right! Beautiful poem. Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ellie LeJeune |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I know you don't have critique on here. But seeing as how you posted it for the book, I would like to point out, that this stanza isn't making much sense to me. songs that have drowned in layers of time you and warm white walls we don't need to rhyme This stanza is beautiful words just fall between me and you like angels fallen to the dew  |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 I stood on the beach overlooking the Pacific Ocean this weekend and let me say that the Ocean is a most serene place to be alone with God.Bob <>< |
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