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jennie may*
Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122


0 posted 2000-06-24 02:54 AM


if you can hear me

give me wings
and time to breathe
and a man who sings

like an angel
with dark brown eyes
and a tidal embrace
that never dies

like every lover's
promises
and soft touches
and eyes that
accept blushes

if you are watching
send me an angel
who will sew himself to
my side

a man who doesn't know
how to say
goodbye...




© Copyright 2000 jennie may* - All Rights Reserved
douglasbailey
Junior Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 27
Palmerston North, New Zealand
1 posted 2000-06-24 03:30 AM


I LOVE THIS - I think this is so great that it's worth stealing.  May I please have permission to use this to show my friend how I feel about her? - I'll just change the man to woman. and I'll stick by Jannie May at the bottom (credit where it's due).

I wanted to write her a poem today - and you've written it and I'm not sure how I could do better to expalin to her what she is to me.

Alexander Duke
Junior Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 12

2 posted 2000-06-24 06:20 AM


if you are watching
send me an angel
who will sew himself to
my side

a man who doesn't know
how to say
goodbye...

Beautiful Lines

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
3 posted 2000-06-24 07:12 AM


Dear jennie; WELCOME! What an entrance! Your poem is so romantic, "a man who doesn't know how to say goodbye"! I love this. Put to music, it would make a great country western song. Can't wait to see more poetry from you.
Ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

ellie LeJeune


Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
4 posted 2000-06-24 09:11 AM


Jennie May, what a lovely way to come into Spiritual...we are all looking forward to many more lovely pieces from you.

Welcome to Passions!

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
5 posted 2000-06-24 09:37 AM


Welcome to Spiritual Jennie!

This is a tender piece, and I great enjoyed reading it! I love the last stanza  

I hope we are able to enjoy more from you!

Lighthousebob
Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725
California
6 posted 2000-06-24 12:18 PM


Welcome to Passions.  I enjoyed your subtle request... I hope that he hears and answers.  Angels are so hard to find.

Bob <><

BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
7 posted 2000-06-24 06:46 PM


Welcome jennie - What a beautiful poem.  I agree with Ellie, this would make a great song.  Look forward to reading more of your work.  Bonnie
Michele Antoinette
New Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 5

8 posted 2000-06-25 01:09 AM


A beautiful poem, - tidal embrace ... sew.... great imagery,
Thanks Jenny



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