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Allstaria22
Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 83
MN USA

0 posted 2000-06-13 06:19 PM


happiness for me is merely
a dream
a fleeting glance
of hope and joy
I wish upon a star
the star falls
and fades away
I cry my tears of
failure
a puddle of unwant
collects
there is more to me
but most don't know
look deep
and know me
not the outside
but the real me
I am more than a picture
I am a complex
masterpiece
my life slowly
begins to brighten
who has done
this thing
why am I now happy
who could allow me to smile
I know who it was
and His love will
never die
I love Him
and He loves me
I am safe
in the arms of God.

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 Isaiah 1:18
"Everyone loves a rose, will you be thankful for the thorns?"


[This message has been edited by Allstaria22 (edited 06-14-2000).]

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ellie LeJeune
Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
1 posted 2000-06-13 06:40 PM


"I am safe in the arms of God"! I love your poem and I feel so happy just reading it. Thank you for this lovely reminder. Ellie

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Alle'cram
Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
2 posted 2000-06-13 06:48 PM


Allstaria, Wonderful job and I join with you in finding comfort in His love. We are surely disappointed in day to day dreams but find joy in knowing we are preparing for eternal rewards. Loved this piece. Marcy
WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
3 posted 2000-06-14 11:33 AM


One little note here, I think you meant this to be a (than) and not a (that) "I am more that a picture"

This sends of one of those bubbling feelings after reading it! It draws excitement from the reader. Wonderful, wonderful work!

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
4 posted 2000-06-14 11:49 AM


"I am a complex
masterpiece..."

and believe me, Allstaria, He did not mean to make anything simple!

This was a nice piece of work and I concur with Whtdove and the slight change that could be made.

Then, a masterpiece, as you are!


 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


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