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Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA

0 posted 2000-05-15 02:39 PM



On a moonless night the spirits dance
The fires sweep the priestess prance
Hollowed logs deep beat the soul
The pounding feet will pay the toll
The crickets preach, the owls speak
Embers glow along the mountains peak
On this plateau its the belief
That angels come and grant relief
The air is dry, the woman ill
The bowl so empty, nothing will fill
A parade of screams and raising hands
Entice the spirits to revive these lands
A cloudless morning up with the sun
So long a night awake no one
The new day spills across the earth
Revealing to all of its rebirth
The crickets listen, the owl did too
When awoke, the land cheered for all was new

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WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
1 posted 2000-05-15 05:55 PM


Welcome WHB! The land cheered for all was new! I love this poem. It's flow was great, and the imagery well done. One day this earth will return to its original formation, I can only imagine the beauty  

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Our background and circumstances may have influenced who we are, but we are responsible for who we become.


Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
2 posted 2000-05-16 01:52 AM


WHB, Great poem! Say, that wouldn't happen to be one of my Assembly of God or Penecostal Sisters, would it?(lol). I can say that, 'cause that would include me too!
I really liked this poem. Thanks, marcy

deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
3 posted 2000-05-16 05:57 AM


Your poem is fresh and brimming with life & hope-your use of imagry is very moving-I find this a vey interesting poem.  Welcome BOB, we look forward to more.   David

 "GOD GIVES- but man must open his hand." (German Proverb)


BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
4 posted 2000-05-16 08:42 AM


Wobbly Head - What imagery!!!  A beautifully written picture.  Bonnie
LadySofia
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since 2000-05-16
Posts 238
FL., USA
5 posted 2000-05-16 10:05 PM


Dear Wobbly Head Bob,

What a wonderful scheme of life and spiritualism! I really liked the flow of it, like a stream becoming a mighty river that tumbles over the edge of a waterfall, then to calm again upon the shores of rebirth. Inspiring!

^_^ LadySofia


 "To the innocent and ancient ones, the sparks which light our fires." Amanda Piatt


ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
6 posted 2000-05-17 04:18 AM


Bob; Welcome to Spiritual! I really like this flowingly lovely poem. One line especially..."the Angels come and grant relief", so inspiring and the flow perfecting the imagery. more,more!  Ellie

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Kavika
Junior Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 35
Wyoming
7 posted 2000-05-17 05:36 AM


There is a theory which states that if ever anybody discovers exactly what the Universe is for and why it is here, it will instantly disappear and be replaced by something even more bizarre and inexplicable. There is another theory which states that this has already happened.

This however, is a beautifully written poem and I hope to read more soon!  
God bless you!

Grandma Amy

 ``Some have learnt many Tricks of sly Evasion, Instead of Truth they use Equivocation, And eke it out with mental Reservation, Which is to good Men an Abomination. ''

- Benjamin Franklin

Wobbly Head Bob
Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
8 posted 2000-05-17 10:45 AM


Thank you all for the good words and praise, I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem!!!  

PS. Kavika, I love Douglas Adams!

Dennis L. White
Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
9 posted 2000-05-17 11:20 AM


WHB,
  This is a vivid description of devout spiritual expression with expectation of Divine interaction. Most cultures realize that there is a Force bigger than ourselves and seek to worship and appease this entity for favor and blessings. Your poem is well written with such wonderful imagery and flow.
I look forward to more of your work here.
                          Dennis :^)

Kavika
Junior Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 35
Wyoming
10 posted 2000-05-17 02:46 PM


Very good my dear.  It is not many who could name who said that qoute! Once again, beautiful poem

Grandma Amy

 ``Some have learnt many Tricks of sly Evasion, Instead of Truth they use Equivocation, And eke it out with mental Reservation, Which is to good Men an Abomination. ''

- Benjamin Franklin

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