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Vincent Spaulding
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0 posted 2000-02-15 07:20 AM


This poem is a Cinquain.  It's America's answer to the Haiku.  Its five lines contains this pattern of syllables: 2-4-6-8-2.

 

Procrastination



A deed
accomplished not,
befitting that I do,
will nag incessant till the day
it's done.




[This message has been edited by Vincent Spaulding (edited 02-15-2000).]

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ellie LeJeune
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1 posted 2000-02-15 07:55 AM


Lovely, Vincent. That is usually how God works with me. He keeps gently, on my mind, His will, untill I pay attention. Thank you. Lovely verse. Ellie

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OWPEMT
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2 posted 2000-02-15 09:30 AM


Very nice and right to the point,
Sandy
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sandgrain
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3 posted 2000-02-15 10:50 AM


Truly few power packed lines.  I like the style, too.
WhtDove
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4 posted 2000-02-15 07:43 PM


So few words, says a mouthful!

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There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins

deleeme
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5 posted 2000-02-15 07:59 PM


Vincent-
It doesn't take a lot of words to say Much.  I am afflicted with a somewhat spirit of Procrastination in some things, and I can personally attest to the truth of your words.  How much better it is to launch out in faith & love to do things than to be perpetually nagged by a guilty conscience.
  Thanks for your meaningful message,  David

 "Our Creativity points to a Higher Creator--we couldn't have just happened, and for what ability we may possess--to God be the glory." -dlw-



Songbird
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6 posted 2000-02-15 10:54 PM


Love your little poem, it says so much in so few words. It made me laugh, as the word procrastination seems to have been my middle name at many times in my life. It brought a funny memory to mind also, as one time around New Year's at church, everyone was asked to write down a new year's resolution without signing our names to it and put it in a basket for another person to draw out and read to the group. Well my resolution was not to procrastinate as much as I had been doing.  Well the person who drew my resolution out and read it, did not know what the word meant, and thought it was some terrible sin, and with a scowling look on her face said, "We certainly never want to do that and if we are doing it we need to stop doing it immediately!" No one else spoke up so apparently no one else knew what the word meant or was too embarressed to say after they had given it such a critical review. I was very shy at the time, and also didn't want to embaress her and myself my telling my knowledge of the word.
Vincent Spaulding
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7 posted 2000-02-16 06:53 AM


Thank you all.  What brought the poem to my own mind is a book I've been writing off and on since I was 16 years old.  I completed it last December at age 45, having written 2/3 of it in six months.  But now comes the editing--and the procrastination.

Septsong--Your story reminds me of how shocked we all were when in a business meeting our pastor used the word "niggardly."
No one but him knew that the word meant stingy and has no racial conotation whatever. Recently I heard of a government worker who was fired for using the word "niggard," meaning a stingy person.  He appealed, and the court determined that he shouldn't be punished for his supervisor's poor vocabulary.

Denise
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8 posted 2000-02-16 11:20 AM


I like this style of poetry! Good job, Vincent! It says it all!  

Denise

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9 posted 2000-02-16 09:07 PM


I like this poem, although I'm a terrible procrastinator! (spelling, I'm sure)

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

ill_tactics
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10 posted 2000-02-17 05:17 PM


ahhhh, procrastination, known all too well.  This was nice, I gotta write me some like that.  Straight to the point, no playing with words, how I like my men..hahah  Excellent....Much love, One love, PEACE
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