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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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I dreamt I was in Heaven and while walking on a cloud I stopped to pick a rose to lend colour to my shroud There were many roses there along the path I walked but one stood out and beckoned me and by this rose I stopped I looked upon this rose so beautiful and rare I wondered should I pick it as I lingered there The petals were so soft and sweet the stem so straight and strong the leaves were the brightest green and it seemed to sing this song Please pick me for your very own I know I am a little shy but if you leave me here alone I shall wilt and die It will hurt a little when you free me from the rest but most of all, I love you! and it will be for the best Yes, I said, I'll pick you and take you to my throne for you are the sweetest rose that I have ever known I'll guard your secrets with my love and caress you tenderly I'm so glad this beautiful rose was waiting just for me Then the breeze blew and the Golden cloud was gone I stared and wondered why my rose should fade with the dawn Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* [This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 02-09-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Echo, this poem is SO beautiful, with such lovely imagery and detail... and a very thought provoking message in its meaning. Im glad your still here with us sharing your wisdom!! take care, janet marie ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces--- did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still... and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you Janet! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Yes, this is truely a beautiful poem! Keep up the good work! "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Heavens rose, bet it had no thorns. I enjoyed this |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
what an excellent read....heavenly one could say...(so i will)hehe....really great echo.. "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Is this what you were working on that you didn't like? Well, you're wrong! It's fabulous! What a picture you've painted here, I was walking in that dream! Excellent Echo! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
L.B...Thank you, and I will try Sandgrain...Thorns? In heaven? I don't think so, I think Jesus had enough thorns to deal with while on earth! I am glad that you enjoyed this! Majestic....and I heard you loud and clear! Thank you! 'becca...No, this isnt the poem I was talking about, the one I was talking about is called The Trip in OP6, and I still don't like it LoL. I am glad you liked this one though! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Willem Member
since 1999-11-18
Posts 139Inverness, FL, USA |
Echo, I liked the powerful imagery in your poem, but the end left me a bit sad... Please write another couplet to it, showing that when you fully awoke there was a beloved and beautiful person right near you, so the rose wss not really gone.  Willem |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Echo; This is so hauntingly beautiful, and so mystical. Just lovely. |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Melanie, You've written several poems about dreams, and this one is superb. I guess we'll have to start calling you BEAUTIFUL DREAMER. God bless you, David |
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OWPEMT Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 63389 Noble Road West, Shiloh, Ohio 44878 USA |
I liked it very much, it was soft and so great, look forward to more of your works, Sandy OWPEMT |
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